VN Ren'Py Abandoned Inevitable Relations [v0.1b] [KinneyX23]

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The build is working great. I didn't experience any problems getting the game to run.
I don't wan to be complaining too much, however I would appreciate, if you could sharpen the used in the main menu as well as the intro scenes. It could increase the readability by quite a bit.

Maybe I'm just too tired and things too blurry.
That's the feedback I have for now. Can't wait for more content.
 

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I just checked the images again, on my screen with 1920x1080 and my tv with 3840x2160 they aren't, on my laptop with just 1366x768 resolution they are blurry as well. So I think it's a resolution issue, I'll look into it and maybe change the images or the font. ;)
 

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I wish I could play female protagonist games but I just can't. Porn games for me are a fantasy and that fantasy doesn't involve having a vagina and being penetrated repeatedly.
 

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Who said, that she is being or will be penetrated over and over again. ;)
Like I said, she won't be like the typical women in these games, it's not even set in stone, that she has any hetero sexual encounter during your playthrough. (In the future) It will be entirely up to you, if she has or not.
Which doesn't mean, that there won't be any hetero sexual scenes, just not necessarily with Beth. ;)
 

trumpthatbitch

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Who said, that she is being or will be penetrated over and over again. ;)
Like I said, she won't be like the typical women in these games, it's not even set in stone, that she has any hetero sexual encounter during your playthrough. (In the future) It will be entirely up to you, if she has or not.
Which doesn't mean, that there won't be any hetero sexual scenes, just not necessarily with Beth. ;)
Thanks for that maybe I'll give it a try then.
 

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Since the game is still very short and feels like an alpha version, I only have two thoughts about it at the moment.

1. I really like the new perspective. There are so many games where you play the son who tries to seduce all family members. It's a relly nice change to play the mother, even more so if you have the choice to join in or try to prevent anything "indecent" from happening.

2. The game is pretty linear so far, which is fine, but the one time you had a choice (greeting your son), both choices felt very awkward. I mean you see your son after 1 year for the first time and you can either joke about having sex with him and your wife, which felt totally out of place, or you can shout at him for not calling you. Why? :confused:
You definitely need more options here.

I'm ambivalent regarding the job as a cop. One the one hand, it could be really interesting, you could also add a male or female partner, on the other hand I would always advice to make one step at a time, especially when you're inexperienced.
 

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Don't worry, another choice will be implemented again. I scrapped that for now, because of the protagonists change in appearence.
Also, with upcoming versions, These two options you have so far are becoming more clear, on why they were in there. With the coice to confront him, I added part of the explanation on why Beth might to do it, already. It will be expanded.
Furthermore, you're not really shouting at him, and the reason isn't that he didn't call, it's because Beth is "pissed" at him, for hurting Eva.
I know, that there still is a lot that has to be implemented and explained, but as I said it's coming. :)

But to give you guys a quick update, I just finished the phone call, to Leo (Beth's brother, where Charlie stayed). It will add about 600 words, plus there will be new renders and other scenes, that will be implemented in version 0.02. So the game will get much bigger, with a lot more renders, a hell of lot more words than it has now and some things will be expanded further.
 

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I have one question.
Is it going to be Visual Novel or a Kinetic Novel?

My inkling is towards the VN scale of things, but I've seen entries like this that just exist to tell a story instead of being a game.
 

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Just playing through the latest fix (prefer the new choices to welcome the son home btw) - got a few grammatical fixes for ya :) You know that grammar Nazi friend you have on Facebook - that's me!!! Blame my wife, she created me :(

- want not wanted
- no need for the comma after Now - it reads fine as "Now that that's almost done, a day full of idiots is waiting for me..."
- Suggestion: Oh right, you don't know what my job is, do you? Silly me! You know what? Let's just blame the dev for being so obsessed with me to tell you what my job is.
- drop the comma between "little teaser" and "of what might happen"
- Now I really need to get going, see you soon (Although there is no grammatical rule against starting a sentence with a conjunction, I was raised and taught by shitty teachers and my wife agrees it reads better and she has nice tits?!)
- Drop the comma, it's not required. "Do you really think he's still into Eva?" reads fine.
- Again, unnecessary comma. "So what do you want to talk about?" is fine.
- A couple of unnecessary commas here. Try "Honey, I think Charlie isn't telling the whole truth about his feelings." or maybe reword to "I don't think Charlie is telling the whole truth about his feelings." or maybe "I don't think Charlie is being honest about his true feelings." You know the characters better than I, I'm just playing with the language forced on me since birth :p
- drop the comma after arrived and replace overhered with overheard.
- Maybe restructure into two sentences. "He didn't go into specifics on what these thoughts might be. I don't think it was all about Eva." or maybe "He didn't go into specifics on what these thoughts might be. Although I don't think it was all about Eva."
- You have developed an unnatural attraction to commas. :p Try "So you think he's still into Eva but at the same time, he's developing an attraction towards us?
- No need for your beloved commas :p "Maybe but more specifically towards you. What happened when he returned?"
- Try "He explained why he didn't call. And I sort of get why."
- Try "I told him that he should apologise to Eva and that's it."
- Shed some light onto, not into
- feelings
- Try "I know but get some sleep. You have a very stressful day tomorrow."
- The usual. It reads fine without the comma clutter.
- "Me too."?? Is Alex avoiding saying I love you due to a lack of love for Beth? If you intend it to be a lazy, reciprocal phrase, then "You too." If you don't want any confusion over their relationship, maybe "Love you too" is more fitting? But like I said earlier, they are your characters :)

I'll make different decisions and post more if I see 'em. Unless I've pissed you off wearing my grammar Nazi uniform (only the hat and boots to keep the missus interested)
 

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Holy crap! :D Thanks, if you find anything, please tell me, but if it's not too much to ask, do with a PM, or in discord. It's easier and it won't fill the thread too much.

I will correct those mistakes now, so in the next version, they are gone.
And while I'm talking about the next version, I can't give a release date yet, but I hope to finish around the end of August. Which means, that I will release it on Patreon first and few days later here. It will be the same version, there won't be a Patreon special editions, so you will get to play exactly the same game, just a little bit later.
 

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KK - I'll PM you - I had a quick flash through the messing with route - might just cap the text box - save space on Imgur :p
Gotta go wash the pots etc - real life butts in :(

TTFN
 

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Okay, I went through it. Damn I really have an unnatural attraction to commas. :D But maybe that's because of my heritage. And Nazi, sadly I might add, isn't really far from the truth, if you think of the past Germany had and the perception were still getting in some countries.

As for the last part you wrote. Yes there I definitely was lazy, but not because I wanted to, just because I didn't know a nickname for Alex yet.
btw You don't have to add an image to show where the mistake was. I know when and where I wrote a line, or which part of a conversation that was. :)

PS: I am no Nazi and I never will be. If I were, my girlfriend wouldn't be of arabic heritage. ;)
 

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I just want to start out saying that I like the story that you have going and that I am looking forward to seeing how it progresses. I will make the suggestion to put the opening text to a click to advance sort of set up though, my reason is that I am one that reads really slowly and with the bright pink lettering it was difficult for me to read fast. I say 'bright pink' as it was to me and due to some issues i have some colors, so feel that click or pressing space to advance may help others that are similar to me. Anyhow that is my two cents worth thanks for a great introduction to your game
 

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Thanks for the suggestion, I will look into it.
I changed the automatic progression, to a click progression for now. But maybe I'm going to change the introduction all together, with other colors and a different font.
 
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garyH

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Very hopeful for this one so far, it breaks many of the norm's set in 99% of these games. PC is female instead of normal D-bag male, mother has replaced absent husband with another woman instead of ever other man that crosses her path, and main male character has a normal sized dick instead of a grotesque third arm between his legs.
Only real issue i have is how short the game is but that's to be expected with a 0.1 release. Looking forward to more content in the future.
 
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