Ren'Py Abandoned After Class [v0.05] [RAR Games]

[Darkaura]

Eh... It's an OK start if dev can roll with it.

Renders - C- girls look a bit pallid to me and I've see hotter posing in the Big Brother fan art page. Unless this is Zombie High... Animation B+ I might/could fap to that. Story premise A+ Breaking Bad teacher who DGAF, could be extra fun. Story implementation/Gameplay D- dead end, game-over, dialogue options are low rent.

Two stars is about right, for now. I'd probably go 3 stars as at least there is SOME sexy-time and dev isn't on another gott dammed blue-ball DMD clone fest.

 

[macadam]

honestly, i like a bit of pubes.
at least something different from lots of others game.
and honestly say , more realist.

 

[tsunku]

I understand the paradigm that everyone else has set for these types of games is mainly used for making money. Make people work for it. Seeing as I am also a novelist I can tell you that most stories worth reading start with a lot of action. You don't want to alienate your readers by trying to make them work for anything. Not a single thing. Not until they start becoming invested in the characters. Then you can make people work a little. That's why the game is starting out with a quick fuck just to get it out of the way for a bit. Mainly to introduce more characters to fuck later on. Does that answer your concerns?

well it's better than the ones where 800 days go by and you still have only peeked at a few girls in the bathroom, had zero sex, or even a remote promise of sex....

 

[Mikedazz1]

there is very little that can be played in this game clear is version 0.02

 

[Saint Blackmoor]

Hee Hee , she doesn't look 18.

 

[myuhinny]

Needs fake horse cock loser protagonist tag. The girls look sexy but the sex scenes just look stupid and boring with that fake horse cock and makes me not even really want to bother with this game.

 

[ontach]

Needs fake horse cock loser protagonist tag. The girls look sexy but the sex scenes just look stupid and boring with that fake horse cock and makes me not even really want to bother with this game.

Above-average large, sure, but fake?

 

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Added mods section

 

[PeggyBlackett]

Image enhancement mod is not accessible on Mediafiles

 

[IhaveNoPornAndIMustFap]

After Class v0.04

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Heya, thanks for sharing. I'm assuming you're sharing because you want some feedback / constructive criticism. Well allow me...

First of all, I recommend you tone it down on the facial expressions on the girls, especially the first girl looks pretty scary. There's a reason the gobbos in those games always have those blank expressions, it's because making them have actual facial expressions makes them immediately look horrible and uncanny. I guess DAZ just doesn't do the facial structure and ligaments right for that kinda thing, but I'm not not a DAZ user so I can only tell you about what I've observed. In general, the stills look badly composed especially in terms of color & lighting. So yeah, you gotta work on your daz magic.

Second, always give us the option to snub a girl. I mean there's the slag that shows you her cooch at the start and there doesn't seem to be a way not to shag her. Except the option that crashes the game. I didn't want to shag her and the game made me shag her. I'm not a teenager that needs to fuck every skank that flashes me her pussy, and neither is supposedly the teach. If you don't have the option to tell her to get her ho ass outta here, then shagging her means nothing in the first place. And for a setup where you (as the teach) "accidentally" shag one of your pupils and then a whole convoluted plot brews from that, it's not very well developed.

Third: Dream sequences like that suck. It's just a guy jerking off. Don't give me internal dialogue of my player avatar, I can do my own internal dialogue thank you very much. You can have guys jerking off in games with a female player character, or have it a player decision (with the possibility of someone walking in on you) as some sort of retarded enticement move.

Fourth: The 4th option (motion her to sit on my cock) in the only decision in the game ends the game prematurely.

Finally: Keep practicing. Lots of devs started out with something like this and just got better over the months at doing this devving thing they do.

As for potential checker-outers: This is basically "Baby's first renpy/daz porn game", its over in less than 5 minutes, and while it definitely doesn't blueball you, it's barely any more than a test of daz3D and renpy, this is the dev experimenting. And it shows that the dev needs to practice more if he wants to deliver a viable product.

 

[bas]

@monkeybird69

Members are free to post their feedback - both positive and negative - about any game so long as they remain respectful of other members. I've read the feedback this member provided, and while some of it is obviously critical, it's in no way a violation of our forum rules. You of course are also free to respond to their feedback, so long as it doesn't violate those rules as well.

I'd suggest if you don't want people's feedback about your game, don't post it here. Thanks

 

[bas]

Updated OP with v0.4

 

[maze-runner]

I'd suggest if you don't want people's feedback about your game, don't post it here. Thanks

your idea of "feedback" and mine are shall we say on the other sides of the maze. that being said thank you very much for crunching games/novels for us. i am very grateful for your work.

 

[bsjfan69]

The art is ok, but I would suggest putting a warning in the OP telling people that there is basically 30 seconds worth of content, and that it's not a game.

 

[Julio]

#1. On the are you 18 prompt, either stick to capitalization or none, "No" then "yes" makes it look like you don't care.
#2. Don't use blurred out stock images.
#3. Don't use the cameras headlamp, add lights. Way too dark, don't rely on photoshop to fix this.
#4. If your gonna have an animation, have a decent fps
#5. Watch for clothes clipping characters
#6. Yellow eyes aren't real
#7. If your render has fireflies, then it doesn't have enough iterations

 

[Adoringfan]

Well you made a thing and it's not in engrish, so good job there. It's put together pretty well for what it is, I mean there is a lot wrong with it, but if you are just trying to show people what you can do it's a good effort for sure.

Minor dings I caught were:
- file is bloated for the amount of content (needs compressing)
- font color + background pics at start made it hard to read (white on white),
- lighting was insufficient (unless you are going for the run down poor school kinda vibe),
- mc seems like an entitled prick (if you can't sell the star of the show, why would anyone play your game?),
- characters are boring fuckdolls, (I get it's a demo, but first impressions are kind of important),
- first girl you fuck is either a midget or a child (giant dong didn't help that scene at all),
- giant dong (yes it can make posing easier, most times it's just laziness, either way it's over-saturated in porn games),
- floating dick (there is a penis with no body attached to it, this is considered a cardinal sin in porn games),
- girl at end had dandruff (might be an issue with less powerful hardware),

Things you did right:
- music + sounds (good touch, some people will bitch about this frankly because they like to bitch but i liked it),
- poses and adhering to gravity (you obeyed the laws of physics, no floating models),
- animation (it didn't look like shit and wasn't jerky, so kudos to you),

There are plenty of people on the site and discord that can help you git gud, but for a first iteration it wasn't bad. You have all the right elements to make the cake, now it's just getting the recipe down.

 

[Soulbringer71]

Should remove the visual enhancement mod because the file does not even exist. As far as the link provided says.

 

[Papy.ion6984]

TY for this update

 

[Echoic]

Thanks for the update man. I love the models and the dialog. Keep it up!

 

[IhaveNoPornAndIMustFap]

If you tell me what you like about it we can build from there but if you're gonna be extremely over critical then maybe just keep it to yourself?

Dude you haven't seen me be extremely over critical. Anyhow, what I like is possibly the setup. The teach not giving a fuck allows for a lot of fucked up things to happen. Having the uppity slag suck you off for not failing class, then having the slag try to blackmail you right back for doing that, etc. I've played Teachers Pet back when it was good, but I think it handled the setting wrong and had too much focus on the family. Ignoring the family altogether and just focusing on messing around in school sounds good to me. A school setting is begging for a daily scheduling system where you can choose to explore and do lewd things in every time time slot. And renpy supports that kinda thing fairly well, you just need to do a little bit of python. Of course that also means a lot of content has to be generated, for both those lewd activities and the non-lewd alternatives (which should always exist), possibly color coded locations (classrooms at dusk/midday/dawn, with and without pupils, etc) and lots of creative ways to mess with the students.