Ren'Py Abandoned After Class [v0.05] [RAR Games]

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AJBit

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Very good! Nice petite models :)

But Cheryl's ass looks weird on the chair, like she had surgery
 

pavar

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A few points:
Either full bush, trimmed bush, or shave it, the few wisps of pubic hair look unkept.
Lighting need improvement (already mentioned by others). Raising the lighting via photoshop might alter the lighting in the whole image, maybe an extra light in the rendering cold prove a better alternative.
Png are 2MB each. Either go to jpg, webm or, if you wish to keep working with pngs, run them through a tool like PNGGauntlet to reduce size. I ran a test with the pic "cherry at the door worried" and it reduced it to 1504kb from 2232KB without reducing quality. Thats 67% of the original.
Way too short, this is a tech demo, not a demo.
Reduce a bit the size of the firehose AKA dick.

I like the "nothing to loose" concept. Going forward you might perhaps sell grades for favors (just an idea). I will follow and see how it goes. All in all, even though it's under 2 minutes it managed to make me interested.
 
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pavar

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Also there is not alot we know about cheryl as of yet. Maybe pubes are a sign of something? I just think it's a little early for someone other than the writer of the game to make such judgement calls. And the lighting in the room is the lighting of the room. Outside of the room its around lunchtime. Most summer college courses are only half day. So it's bright outside the room but in there its not. Realistic lighting and not superly over produced lighting is essential for creating a believable environment. So leaving the lights at a reasonable level adds to mood and realism.
Of course the writer must decide! Anyway else and the game might go off the rails from the original concept. It was never my intention to push you to alter your concept in any way. The points I mentioned were my visual impressions based on what I saw so far. It goes without saying that if you did these things on purpose, you should not change them.
 
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pavar

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This game is version 0.01 ... I mean should I have put more zeroes? lol It's barely even ready to show yet if that tells you anything. but it's free :p
I was not criticizing. I fully encourage people making their games and as far as my wallet can stand it (not much lately, tbh) I try to support them. It was never my intention to offend, if I did so nonetheless I apologize. And I reiterate: I like the concept and what you seem to be doing with it.
 

ontach

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A few points:
Either full bush, trimmed bush, or shave it, the few wisps of pubic hair look unkempt.
Reduce a bit the size of the firehose AKA dick.

I like the "nothing to lose" concept. Going forward you might perhaps sell grades for favors (just an idea). I will follow and see how it goes. All in all, even though it's under 2 minutes it managed to make me interested.
I agree with the comment about the bush. She looks as if she hasn'e shaved in a week. Go shaved - easier to render, easier to compress.
Agree about the dick, too. Looks unnatural.

Finally, good start. Could be a little less depraved to begin with - 'accidental' flashes and peeks, imagined scenes, etc. - working up gradually to what you have now. You've got him thinking like a perv - that's half the job done.
 
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tsunku

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Depends. If you shoot a porno with her and sell it in the US your fine, if you sell it in Germany you can end up in jail.
if you sell in australia they'll say oh she doesn't have giant tits therefor she's a minor....
 

smith66

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You know what all new game devs should do. Check out the first few pages of comments for all the most popular games see and see all the negative comments they got at the start. I think it will help put things into perspective.

Good luck and keep on trucking man.
 

tsunku

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But the guys in the nondescript van nearby aren't convinced she's 32. :test:
After I checked this out, I went for a walk looking for suspicious vans. All clear! Whew!
i guess it's a good thing that we both are always armed. in case any suspicious vans show up, we can just shoot whoever comes out of them...
 

macadam

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i m good with that...

i dont give a shit as its pixel... nobody gonna condamn me to play a game

( as long i not do that in reality, i m perfectly clean in brain and all )

a sweet game idea. can be promising in futur and animation are well done
 
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