VN Ren'Py Abandoned My Dark Desires [v0.1 Test] [PSHOTGAMES]

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TobyQ

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I realize this is just a first dropped development introduction, but already there is a plot inconsistency. Ok, so the MC's family moved, this is the first time he sees the new large house coming home, yet he knows exactly where to go to get to his room?
maybe mom whispered in his ear on the drive over.
 

PeggyBlackett

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I realize this is just a first dropped development introduction, but already there is a plot inconsistency. Ok, so the MC's family moved, this is the first time he sees the new large house coming home, yet he knows exactly where to go to get to his room?
He has a GPS
 
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TundraLupus

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Gonna give this a shot mostly cause the dev is Brazilian(from what I gathered), but let's see how it goes, I'll be making bullet points and this will get long as fuck so I'm sorry in advance.

1. the age thing as most people have said is very off increase the mother age by 10.

2. don't forget your "r", when we are speaking it doesn't matter too much but it does when writing and reading so that it can be understood "gosta" - "gostar", "chega" - "chegar", also you "o ajudasse" could just not have the "o" and it would be fine, also don't forget the "," so that the writing can have the right passing, I'll not nitpick anymore on language than this( I hope) but I'll leave this here as a heads-up to what you should keep an eye out for. edit: writing even in Portuguese needs a lot of improvement.

3. Mc feels a little too horny and indiscreet but that is par for the course and as a horny person I get it, just don't think the whole staring at a stranger's tits and then turning around to stare at their ass being my style.

well, that was short, not much more to say really, it is very cliche which is sad because since the dev is not from the USA they should use more of their (or in this case "our") culture and try to veer more towards that instead of doing the cookie cutter "Merican pie" porn story style, but yeah I hope they do well and grow on their own instead of just coping what came before.

now for my preference: harem, sharing, bi/gay content, none of the phobias(lgbtqia+-phobia and shit like that), none of the isms(racism, sexism, etc...), and always give us options on what the character thinks or how they think, probably more but I'll just leave the basics here.

edit: if the dev sees this and wants a pt-br version just pm me.
 
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OmegaLord

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Not sure why this was released atm even as a test.
I did not see any kind of mechanic that should be needed to be checked en mass and there is basically no story to tell so far only the basic premise which could be all told in about one paragraph.

The mothers age is an issue with everything as stated in game. She would be 18 by time she would have started to model if she chose not to raise the kids, I'm saying 18 as with the 3rd child at 16 it would take a bit to get her body back into shape enough to model and be found. So that means in 16 years she would have blown up, been a top model and left long enough ago that she "was" considered a top model.

I don't even know what age she would need to be to fit the elements given, maybe add 15 years so she is 49 then it would have given her a chance between 16-26 to have the time to be a top model.

I don't mind there being a young mother but this is pushing it way too hard, it needs 4-5 years added minimum, still wont fix the legal issues with the father though.

I'll give it a chance once there is something to actually digest but as of right now it's in need of course correction, the english issues I'm not gonna touch on as with getting recognition I'm sure the dev can get help with proper translations.
 

Forgotted

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Yes, but maybe that's just the dev's way of killing off the dad....

Since he's a serial pedophile rapist, he'll go to prison
where they'll rape his ass over and over before killing him.

I had to make the little sister 10 yrs old just to make dad proud!

See... a happy go lucky story after all... lol
Cheers
 
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Saint Blackmoor

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I want an alpha MC, with harem, no sharing or ntr. Probably will get at least one of those.....probably...
Were you trying to be funny here? That might be.
The problem is there are many members talking like that, and they mean it. they are upset because they don't get what they want. If you paid for something and don't get what you expect, then you can be upset.

Because members are from all around the world, their humor might not translate well. I tend to defend the new devs because I've talked to many of them and asked why they abandoned their game, and they said partly from the harassment they encountered here. If you put a lot of work into something and believe it will be enjoyable to many. to be treated badly by someone that has no clue about your struggles is very painful.

I think this site is known for many good things but is also known as a place where there are many immature members. so I apologize if your intention was not to mock the game. New devs here should be encouraged. You never know what great games they might produce in the future. A simple "Good luck with your Game" means a lot. We are a community here. "Community" means many people supporting each other for the benefit of all.
Cheers
 

Freki.g

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Were you trying to be funny here? That might be.
The problem is there are many members talking like that, and they mean it. they are upset because they don't get what they want. If you paid for something and don't get what you expect, then you can be upset.

Because members are from all around the world, their humor might not translate well. I tend to defend the new devs because I've talked to many of them and asked why they abandoned their game, and they said partly from the harassment they encountered here. If you put a lot of work into something and believe it will be enjoyable to many. to be treated badly by someone that has no clue about your struggles is very painful.

I think this site is known for many good things but is also known as a place where there are many immature members. so I apologize if your intention was not to mock the game. New devs here should be encouraged. You never know what great games they might produce in the future. A simple "Good luck with your Game" means a lot. We are a community here. "Community" means many people supporting each other for the benefit of all.
Cheers
Listen, I haven't talked to anyone but, from what I can perceive, I think that if they abandon a game it's because they can't achieve their obscure goals of easy earnings with minimal effort, in two words: failed milking.
And many are trying their luck, encouraged by the fact that some (perhaps too many) have managed to milk for over half a decade with the project initially presented and from the trend of a mostly immature audience that allows such scammers to proliferate.
 
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Were you trying to be funny here? That might be.
The problem is there are many members talking like that, and they mean it. they are upset because they don't get what they want. If you paid for something and don't get what you expect, then you can be upset.

Because members are from all around the world, their humor might not translate well. I tend to defend the new devs because I've talked to many of them and asked why they abandoned their game, and they said partly from the harassment they encountered here. If you put a lot of work into something and believe it will be enjoyable to many. to be treated badly by someone that has no clue about your struggles is very painful.

I think this site is known for many good things but is also known as a place where there are many immature members. so I apologize if your intention was not to mock the game. New devs here should be encouraged. You never know what great games they might produce in the future. A simple "Good luck with your Game" means a lot. We are a community here. "Community" means many people supporting each other for the benefit of all.
Cheers
I was being funny. I guess it didn't end up being that way. There was a few in the thread saying they want sharing and ntr and they hope for it ect ect, so I decided to post something that was what I would want jokingly. Doesn't mean I want this dev to change what they have planned. I support devs on what they want to do, If I don't like something I don't play it. I support anyone who has a creative vision.

I apologize also. I didn't mean any disrespect at all to the dev. I like the models and keeping my eye on this to see where it goes.
 

Saint Blackmoor

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Listen, I haven't talked to anyone, but from what I can perceive, I think that if they abandon a game, it's because they can't achieve their obscure goals of easy earnings with minimal effort, in two words: failed milking.
So, you're putting every abandoned game in that category? You have a sad life ahead of you. please don't respond. You're stinking up my computer.
 
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Saint Blackmoor

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Gonna give this a shot mostly cause the dev is Brazilian(from what I gathered), but let's see how it goes,
A very good run down.

I'll give it a chance once there is something to actually digest, but as of right now, it's in need of course correction, the english issues. I'm not gonna touch on getting recognition I'm sure the dev can get help with proper translations.
It's good to see members that offer help and understand that some devs are new to public comments.
 
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