VN Ren'Py Origin Story [Development Thread]

[CheerMaster]

What's up man, long ass post, and ngl, didn't get to read through every single section of it all, but I really really liked what I did read and what I saw.
Mighty fine renders, and from what I got, some interesting characters as well, especially the invisible girl, that caught me off guard and got a laugh out of me. Also, from the dialogue extract, good stuff, I wish everyone here had good orthography like you.
Looking forward to the game, and hopefully we'll be able to see animations sometime in the near future, no pressure

 

[Saint Blackmoor]

Ditto, what CheerMaster said. Very impressive preparation. Lucía is my favorite so far as looks go.
I wish you much success.

 

[Jacquesdor]

Appreciate it guys!

Lucía is my favorite so far as looks go.

Oh, the Lucía fans are going to have some interesting scenes in the distant future

 

[Saint Blackmoor]

Oh, the Lucía fans are going to have some interesting scenes in the distant future

From your description, it seems she is going to be the catalyst in some evil doings.

 

[Jacquesdor]

I'm still here. I'm still chugging away.

I'm taking the advice from motseer and holding off releasing anything officially for a while, but I am so desperate to get some feedback that I'm going to be releasing the first few chapters as a demo to a few exclusive people in my discord. Demo should be more or less complete in a few weeks. I've just got a huge bunch of renders to do post on and then maybe get a working main menu (though that can wait until the main release if needs be).

Since my last update, a whole lot of writing, post work and a bunch more renders since my last update - here's a few.



Wow, 7/8 of the renders I've chosen to preview are very tit orientated. I guess I'm a breast man.

 

[motseer]

I'm still here. I'm still chugging away.

I'm taking the advice from motseer and holding off releasing anything officially for a while, but I am so desperate to get some feedback that I'm going to be releasing the first few chapters as a demo to a few exclusive people in my discord. Demo should be more or less complete in a few weeks. I've just got a huge bunch of renders to do post on and then maybe get a working main menu (though that can wait until the main release if needs be).

Since my last update, a whole lot of writing, post work and a bunch more renders since my last update - here's a few.

I have been following two development threads and the other one just published about a week ago. If initial reactions are an indicator, it will be a huge success. Origin Story, I believe, is it's equal in every respect - especially attention to detail and preparation. I anxiously await your debut.

Wow, 7/8 of the renders I've chosen to preview are very tit orientated. I guess I'm a breast man.

They just happen to be on the same side as the face and, so, are unavoidable. Dammit!

Edit: Hehe, you should feel honored... You just got my 1,000th post.

 

[Jacquesdor]

I have been following two development threads and the other one just published about a week ago. If initial reactions are an indicator, it will be a huge success. Origin Story, I believe, is it's equal in every respect - especially attention to detail and preparation. I anxiously await your debut.


They just happen to be on the same side as the face and, so, are unavoidable. Dammit!

Edit: Hehe, you should feel honored... You just got my 1,000th post.

Yay! Not gonna lie, there's a huge chance you were the 2000th view on this thread too. Watched it tick over from 1k views to 2k a few minutes before you posted

Just out of curiosity, what was the other project you were keeping an eye on?

 

[motseer]

Yay! Not gonna lie, there's a huge chance you were the 2000th view on this thread too. Watched it tick over from 1k views to 2k a few minutes before you posted

Just out of curiosity, what was the other project you were keeping an eye on?

Move The Chains
If you check it out be sure to read my review. It's short but to the point.

 

[Jacquesdor]

Move The Chains

Had a feeling it might be. From the dev threads I've seen active recently, that looked one of the most promising.

 

[motseer]

Had a feeling it might be. From the dev threads I've seen active recently, that looked one of the most promising.

It's a good case in point of a (relatively) new dev getting LOTS of feedback - some of it moronic, condescending drivel from trolls wanting their special fetish included and all the character interactions following their arbitrary sets of rules. That dev has done a couple of incomplete titles before but, neither got this level of attention. He got a little shaky about trying to please everybody for a bit but quite a few more sensible posters supported and encouraged him. I think it has smoothed out a bit of late.

I really believe you will have a similar strong reaction to your story. If you read the Move the Chains thread and put yourself in his shoes, I think you will get some good mental preparation for your own release.

 

[Jacquesdor]

So I put out a little demo to the handful of people in my discord, and of the ones that played it all have given really positive feedback which was really nice and reassuring. One even called the art "top tier" which is far from the truth but hell I'll take it.

I did get some constructive criticism also, and have made a few changes on a technical level based on that. I promised myself I wouldn't force story changes based on player demand, but there was one big piece of feedback that I agreed with regarding the lack of choice the player will have a certain point and the effect it has on a particular character. It is something I wanted to change for months anyway but just couldn't think of a way to make the story work if I changed it. When the feedback came it just made me realise I definitely needed make it player choice to go down that path rather than story forced. So I thought hard and finally figured it out. Now there's 100 renders remaining for an alternate scene in CH2 queued up and ready to batch render.

And now I'm finally working on posing and rendering CH3 also, and have written up to CH17 now so have an absolute tonne of content ahead of me.

Still a ways off before I put it on F95 though, but we're getting there.

Don't have much to share in the way of newer renders that aren't too spoilery, so here's one from the alternate scene in CH2.

 

[motseer]

So I put out a little demo to the handful of people in my discord, and of the ones that played it all have given really positive feedback which was really nice and reassuring. One even called the art "top tier" which is far from the truth but hell I'll take it.

I did get some constructive criticism also, and have made a few changes on a technical level based on that. I promised myself I wouldn't force story changes based on player demand, but there was one big piece of feedback that I agreed with regarding the lack of choice the player will have a certain point and the effect it has on a particular character. It is something I wanted to change for months anyway but just couldn't think of a way to make the story work if I changed it. When the feedback came it just made me realise I definitely needed make it player choice to go down that path rather than story forced. So I thought hard and finally figured it out. Now there's 100 renders remaining for an alternate scene in CH2 queued up and ready to batch render.

And now I'm finally working on posing and rendering CH3 also, and have written up to CH17 now so have an absolute tonne of content ahead of me.

Still a ways off before I put it on F95 though, but we're getting there.

Don't have much to share in the way of newer renders that aren't too spoilery, so here's one from the alternate scene in CH2.

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You're starting to make me hungry! All this preparation, listening to and incorporating good, positive feedback; I really am anxious for your debut on F95. I think it will be a mind blowing blockbuster!!


************** Mind Blown **************

 

[Jacquesdor]

It's been a couple of months since I had an update so thought I'd drop something in here.

I'm still chugging away at this as much as my personal life will allow (which is not nearly as much as I would like). Probably about 70% of the way through chapter 3 in terms of renders, and the plan is still to start releasing this in individual chapters once 3 is finished... So hopefully before this year is up.

I'm still writing way far in advance and got to a point where I gave up numbering chapters, but I'm pretty sure I have 20 chapters of content ahead of me now. It shouldn't be long before I start taking the story to it's end.

Here's a few more renders since my last update:



And a couple of custom Patreon appreciation renders for I've done for the couple of folks who enjoyed the demo so much they went all out pledging to my highest tier (which promises a custom render of their favourite girls).



Catch you later.

 

[motseer]

When you get close, post up a "Coming Soon" signature here. I will fly the flag and people can start asking, "What is this? Where can I get it?".

I'll be all like...

 

[Jacquesdor]

When you get close, post up a "Coming Soon" signature here.

Well, you asked for it.

 

[motseer]

Well, you asked for it.

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Flag flyin'... I'm a man o' my word.

 

[Jacquesdor]

My man.

Though F95 being wacky and showing my old banner which I didn't even post here.

 

[rogokin]

This looks great can't wait to play it.

 

[motseer]

This looks great can't wait to play it.

Why not fly the "coming soon" banner in the post above for a week or so? Promote the debut. It's gonna be soon and I think it will be one to watch! Jus' Sayin'

 

[Jacquesdor]

Why not fly the "coming soon" banner in the post above for a week or so? Promote the debut. It's gonna be soon and I think it will be one to watch! Jus' Sayin'

Thanks for spreading the word man! You're a real one.

Soon is right... Right now my hopeful release date is December 1st, at least on Patreon... whether I can get it approved and uploaded on the same day here is another thing.