why is this game searchable with a female protag tag but from the looks it doesn't has a female protag from the tags I see? dissapointing
- Feb 16, 2019
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The renders are nice, the models are pretty, but somehow it feels more like a bunch of slides arranged one after another than like an actual story. It's worst when characters have some conversation, and the "camera" keeps switching back and forth from one to the other. It makes it feel like the point of view switches with every sentence. Which actually does happen a lot as well, from one person to the next, to some third person commenting.
Something else I'm not totally fond of, is constantly getting to read the thoughts of all characters. It opens up some things too fast.
Then there's the time progress. It's really disjointed, which is confusing especially combined with all the switches in point of view.
Overal, every sentence you'll end up reading twice, wondering whether it's MC, mother, mothers' friend, his sister, or the third person narrator. The writing needs some consolidation and unification to make more sense. Protagonist switches can still be done, but really need to happen less often, possibly even seperated into more recognizable chapters or segments.
Something else I'm not totally fond of, is constantly getting to read the thoughts of all characters. It opens up some things too fast.
Then there's the time progress. It's really disjointed, which is confusing especially combined with all the switches in point of view.
Overal, every sentence you'll end up reading twice, wondering whether it's MC, mother, mothers' friend, his sister, or the third person narrator. The writing needs some consolidation and unification to make more sense. Protagonist switches can still be done, but really need to happen less often, possibly even seperated into more recognizable chapters or segments.
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I thought the Mom & "her friend" Stella are sisters because they look so much alike. I guess its just a very quick demo so we don't know exactly what will be revealed. Strange why Dev would make them so similar if they're not meant to be related.
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- Feb 26, 2018
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Looks promising, the MC's mo....got me lol. Stella's face reminded me Jordan Carver. Keep it up dev