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i did it only in the "greetings" stuff, so, u can just jump to the story when the mc is in his bed sleeping, and sorry e.e i was like "they're breaking the 4th wall, so, let me do something diferent here"
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Not to sound too harsh, but first impressions can be vital, and the greeting having most of the text doing different things isn't the best, and it does still happen after the bed scene.
(Squints eyes extra hard at that first screen shot)
Looks like something interesting is happening behind that vending machine.
- Aug 26, 2021
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Decent opening I guess, but please for the love of god.
Change that vibrating/glitching/thefuck text in the menu and some of the introduction.
And maybe include character introductions, 2 Elf girls referring to what appears to be a human male brother?
(Bear in mind, a lot of us wont have seen the anime.)
Change that vibrating/glitching/thefuck text in the menu and some of the introduction.
And maybe include character introductions, 2 Elf girls referring to what appears to be a human male brother?
(Bear in mind, a lot of us wont have seen the anime.)
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i'm probally deleting the glitch stuff (or at least puting it in a lower rate) i was thinking about a funny way of breaking the 4th wall when i did it e.e
and, about the anime, to be fair, don't need to watch it at all, its just that, "our would" mixed with a "fantasy world", so, if u think about "years later" isn't strange to have half elfes everywhere :V ( but i'll think about a good introduction for it)
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to be fair, i don't like too much the "you can only choose one" stuff because this hurts too much when u love more than one character e.e, so, i guess harem is ok (but no need to choose then all?)
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I will not put this one in the "Ignore-box", yet, but it's close. If you stop the nonsense with the text, as mentioned by others, and, as also mentioned by others, make a proper introduction, then I'll try to play this.
So I'll give it another chance when I see it next time. Maybe I can finish playing that then, I didn't now.
So I'll give it another chance when I see it next time. Maybe I can finish playing that then, I didn't now.
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yep, already made a better intro and fixed the text stuff on the intro about the world ( on the novel i didn't put it, only when they broke the 4th wall in the first renders)I will not put this one in the "Ignore-box", yet, but it's close. If you stop the nonsense with the text, as mentioned by others, and, as also mentioned by others, make a proper introduction, then I'll try to play this.
So I'll give it another chance when I see it next time. Maybe I can finish playing that then, I didn't now.