- Apr 20, 2024
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Looking forward to the future of this game. rn, there is nothing much going on. (i hope you add male on femboy)
- Mar 25, 2018
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Nice art. I'm surprised there's disagreement over the dialogue, I thought it was decent and there was about the right amount of it (assuming getting caught in the full game would be somewhat impactful and not something that happens every 30 seconds). Typical RPG VNs have like, 200 lines of dialogue after losing a single minute-long fight...
Cute touch to have kaomoji in the dialogue, too. Overall tone of the dialogue reminded me of softer (but still pretty struggle-focused) games like Monster Girl Dreams, Desire Dungeon, and Lost Case: Monster Girl Takeover. Maybe if you're looking for writing style inspiration you could look at those. I'd say the best is to write whatever you personally like the most, but I dunno how well that applies if you're writing in a language you're not 100% confident in, would be a shame to see such nice animation and fantastic presentation arriving alongside stiff dialogue.
Cute touch to have kaomoji in the dialogue, too. Overall tone of the dialogue reminded me of softer (but still pretty struggle-focused) games like Monster Girl Dreams, Desire Dungeon, and Lost Case: Monster Girl Takeover. Maybe if you're looking for writing style inspiration you could look at those. I'd say the best is to write whatever you personally like the most, but I dunno how well that applies if you're writing in a language you're not 100% confident in, would be a shame to see such nice animation and fantastic presentation arriving alongside stiff dialogue.
- Apr 20, 2024
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Thank you! ✨
Comments like this give me confidence.
A new version with goblins is coming out soon!
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