I'm really trying to find good words for this. As a 'proof of concept demo' I feel that you should really be putting your best foot forward and from what I've experienced here, that wasn't that much.
It should be noted that I lost interest part-way through and that I did not finish this demo. I played for an hour and a half and that was almost entirely a kinetic novel full of convoluted socio-political commentary that left me feeling just as confused about wtf was happening as poor Parker Thomson. And I was feeling as bored as the characters looked in the game halfway through the time I gave it.
The game opens with a beautiful render and epic music and then drops almost completely silent after that.
Dialogue in game is very sterile and slow paced. The characters, while beautiful, act just as sterile as the dialogue. There are no animations at all, just gentle transitions as the game progresses like a slide show with occasional mouth flap transitions and all the characters look bored as hell to be in this game while discussing things like terrorism, governmental coups and being put to death. The entire cast feels like stiff robots, standing around and barely moving. The only character that shows any emotion shoots herself in the head with what was the only noticable sound effect in the game along with a sudden cut to black.
This game could seriously show potential if the developer would just give the characters some actual character...
-The ISAC bot? Have it change position or stagger its height between dialogue transitions, back away after it is done talking, make it pivot to look at other characters who are talking, do something to make it feel like a helpful hovering device instead of a 'friendly' Reaper eye that stays right in my face as it stares into my soul.
-The characters could change body stance or position between dialogue transitions, use arm movements. Smile, frown, DO SOMETHING! Parker Thomson was being accused of terrorism, having her life threatened and her dialogue had contempt for those she interacted with. Give some body language to go with that! Put some emotion in that face instead of having her just deadpan stare straight ahead the entire time! The only emotion she showed in several interactions was a look of surprise after the email. After that, she just looked uninterested in everything going on and like she was a zombie.
-You tried to show us some porn with having see-through clothes, having nude characters and even a blowjob at one point... but that blowjob was blurred out in the distance cause camera focus was on a holo-vid conversation happening in front of it. If you're gonna show porn, show it.
Doing just these few things can make the quiet game with dry socio-political commentary feel alot more alive and organic and more interesting and possibly get you the support you're obviously wanting because you're also giving us just a 'demo' of this game to entice us into supporting you.
It should be noted that I lost interest part-way through and that I did not finish this demo. I played for an hour and a half and that was almost entirely a kinetic novel full of convoluted socio-political commentary that left me feeling just as confused about wtf was happening as poor Parker Thomson. And I was feeling as bored as the characters looked in the game halfway through the time I gave it.
The game opens with a beautiful render and epic music and then drops almost completely silent after that.
Dialogue in game is very sterile and slow paced. The characters, while beautiful, act just as sterile as the dialogue. There are no animations at all, just gentle transitions as the game progresses like a slide show with occasional mouth flap transitions and all the characters look bored as hell to be in this game while discussing things like terrorism, governmental coups and being put to death. The entire cast feels like stiff robots, standing around and barely moving. The only character that shows any emotion shoots herself in the head with what was the only noticable sound effect in the game along with a sudden cut to black.
This game could seriously show potential if the developer would just give the characters some actual character...
-The ISAC bot? Have it change position or stagger its height between dialogue transitions, back away after it is done talking, make it pivot to look at other characters who are talking, do something to make it feel like a helpful hovering device instead of a 'friendly' Reaper eye that stays right in my face as it stares into my soul.
-The characters could change body stance or position between dialogue transitions, use arm movements. Smile, frown, DO SOMETHING! Parker Thomson was being accused of terrorism, having her life threatened and her dialogue had contempt for those she interacted with. Give some body language to go with that! Put some emotion in that face instead of having her just deadpan stare straight ahead the entire time! The only emotion she showed in several interactions was a look of surprise after the email. After that, she just looked uninterested in everything going on and like she was a zombie.
-You tried to show us some porn with having see-through clothes, having nude characters and even a blowjob at one point... but that blowjob was blurred out in the distance cause camera focus was on a holo-vid conversation happening in front of it. If you're gonna show porn, show it.
Doing just these few things can make the quiet game with dry socio-political commentary feel alot more alive and organic and more interesting and possibly get you the support you're obviously wanting because you're also giving us just a 'demo' of this game to entice us into supporting you.