VN - Ren'Py - Completed - Haley's Story [v1.1 Pre-Patched] [Viitgames]

This just keeps getting better ... I like the art, like the story and the characters are believable, comfortable and approachable. MC is not a douche-nozzle, Sis is not an idiot, his GF is not crazy, and for once there are a good mix of folks living happly without the lame-assed bbc drama that imho is raciest af. Good job Dev ... I look forward to more.

The renders are quite high quality and the story is good as well, but renders and story alone are not what make this game great. You can produce a cookie cutter story, which this story arguably is, but if you can make characters who feel real through their dialogue and actions then your cookie cutter story can become a classic. This is where Haley's Story shines. The dialogue and character decisions feel real and believable, especially for the main characters, and the renders high quality allows for the characters to have ranged and often surprisingly subtle expressions.

For the few downsides, the game is fairly linear at this point in time and you are forced into a relationship which not all players may be happy with. All of these problems seem to come about as a result of this game's devotion to real characters and competent story. I am happy to surrender over the top porn scenes and vast branching story lines in return for a well paced story with good dialogue and believable characters.

In short, Haley's Story knows what its strong point is and capitalizes on that strength without skimping too much on other gameplay aspects .5/5.

Hate to be critical when people invest a lot of time and effort in a project but this one didn't hold my interest.

The game consists of endless screens to click through, each with a sentence or two of dialogue and therefore the story advances very slowly. After almost inflicting RSI on my poor mouse clicking finger I gave up.

Additionally, I have no interest in banging any kind of blood relative so the story constantly trying to push you down that route got tiresome very quickly although I appreciate there obviously is a market for that kind of thing judging by the number of games catering to it.

On the plus side, the graphics are good and the avatars are attractive. Just too many screens to click through for each tiny piece of story progression.

Well, there we go, my review:

Out of pure curiosity, I decided to download this game and I must honestly say, that I have been positively surprised.
It does not seem to be quite as well known as one might think it would deserve to be, after having completed the current build. (0.25 in my case)

First off: As the title may suggest, the main character of this game seems to be not the actual playable character, but Haley. This is quite uncommon, since most games of this genre seem to be entirely focused on a playable protagonist. Hearing this could make one think, that the playable character is merely an observer, which quite frankly is not completely true. He is an active part of the story, yet he is not alone in that role, considering most engagements are at least subconsciously initiated by Haley.

The characters and their models:

Protagonist:
quite protective of his sister, yet intimately rather reluctant - If it were not for Haleys allusions and hints, their relationship would never develop as it does. - Looks like a somewhat athletic and decent looking guy of maybe 19-21 years (They are twins, although I am not sure, how old they are exactly)

Haley:
very extroverted, playful and jokingly teasing towards her brother. - extraordinarily attractive redhead (I guess, that's preference) desirable figure, looks quite natural (2 hours older than her brother)

Jack - Haley's (former?) boyfriend
Dull plain appearance - rather submissive behaviour - feminine to some degree (the hair doesn't help here)

Victor:
Playable character's superior at work
Squash partner, acquaintance --> friend
Muscular black man, apparently homosexual

Sandra: (girlfriend)
Black women, about the same age as the twins, extensively conservative (prudent?), loyal, trustworthy

Lisa (friend of Sandra)
adventurous, sexually open-minded, ignorant of other's feelings

Adriana: - (Haley's boss - PC's possible Sugar-Mama)
her husband committed adultery multiple times, yet for some reason she seems to be emotionally attached to him - quite interesting concept (female sugar-daddy), sexually a stereotypical Milf

The story itself:
Brother and sister share an apartment, since they both found employment with the same company. Sexual tension between the two of them mixed with some suppressed romantic feelings at least on Haley's side.

Critique and Praise:

- outstandingly believable characters
- well written plot
- typical sibling humour
- slow but intense build-up
- enjoyable renders
- properly integrated sex scenes

- choices seem to be of secondary importance, although this will probably change

All in all a very solid game, most certainly with the potential to be one of the best.


Thank you for your attention.

A realistic story, decent renders, decent writing, beautiful characters, a great developer, and a perfect incest romantic game! choices in this game do matter a lot to open some scenes, which is a great quality of a visual novel. So highly recommended to try this one out and I'm looking forward to play the next updates.

Excellent art and characters. The writer knows how to properly build up dramatic/erotic tension in the story. For this reason, this game might not be right for those looking for more instant gratification, but for those with a bit more patience it can be very rewarding.

The author of the english dialogs is kinda genius! I didn't skip any part of this VN (even when it was pitch-black sometimes), simply because of the excellent writing! I mean, there are decent renders with various expressions, too, but "this" dry wit sorta teasing between siblings which ever gonna raise tension, lust, affection... that's a new leap in quality to me (v0.25)

v0.25
Really good start into the story, a long one but not boring.
There are several good characters with deeper story behind them. From which Haley is one of the best of them.

MC is not a huge perv, twin sis neither. Their love starts slow and sweet..

There is no grinding, just a nice story to watch

+++++ PROPERLY, REALISTICALLY WRITTEN. 'Nuff said considering most of the stuff I see here.

- Forced into one deadweight relationship I wouldn't have gotten into in the first place.
- Wrong labeling of a few dialogs.
- No significant impact of choices yet, but the story is in its early stages as of now.

There are plenty of VNs all across F95z rated 4+ but are actually riddled with amateurish writing and sleazy screenplay. Sometimes their dialogs make me put my palm to my face and whisper, "Somebody please shoot me."

But not this game.

As a student of literature, I know good writing when I see it. The writer of Haley's Story knows how to tell things without telling them. Convey words between the lines. There hasn't been a single other game here that convinced me that a relationship was real. In this one, you actually feel it. The writer plays more with the emotional tension than a sexual one and, boy, do they succeed. That alone is what I was looking for in all the VNs of these genre.

So far so good. No sexual content but surprisingly decent writing for a porn game. Pretty humorous. The relationship between Haley and the MC feel organic, which is rare for a porn game. Renders look good as well. I really hope the sex content is good or at least, the writing continues to be this good.

Pros:

- Haley is amazing: looks, personality, and chemistry with MC - all A+. She might be my favorite female character from all the games I've played, and I don't even like gingers.
- All models look hot and original, not refurbished from other games.
- All characters have their own unique personality and story.
- The story is good and flows well, no awkwardness.
- MC has unique dynamics with every character.

Cons:

- One unavoidable relationship. - Dark skinned characters are sometimes hard to make out in certain setups.

Even though I have downloaded somewhere in the hundreds games from here this is still probably my favorite the characters have the cute factor mixed with the sexy and sweet and the story so far has been simple but great as well I can't help but fall for these girls especially Haley

Let's start with the good stuff:

The renders are nice, although scenes with dark-skinned characters (Victor and Sandra) tend to be way too dark.

Haley's character is quite enjoyable. She's headstrong, smart, cheeky and also pretty relaxed.

The playful banter between the siblings is refreshing.


Now for the stuff I didn't like so much:

Haley isn't that attractive to me.
Her face looks strange (especially her botox lips) and her facial expression frequently reminds me of a scary Chucky doll.

The story.
From the beginning we already know the outcome. To keep things interesting, we should have either been given meaningful choices (like which girl to date) or a feeling of threat we could possibly lose Haley to another guy - or both.
Haley's Story gives us none of this - instead we get pretty much railroaded through the story and the little choices we have are for the most part cosmetic.

We also get forced into a relationship with Sandra.
I like Sandra, but forced relationships are a terrible idea.
It's never really explained why Sandra and the MC are dating and what they see in each other - there's almost zero chemistry between them. Especially the MC doesn't seem to have any genuine feelings for her.
In fact he ALWAYS shows the same blank facial expression - even during scenes when Sandra is cuddling with him.

Speaking of male characters: They are either wimps, creeps - or gay.

Jack is portrayed as an one-dimensional laughing stock with one purpose: getting dumped.
Haley doesn't even want to spend time with him or properly kiss him - he's just an annoyance to her.
So why are they even a thing?
To me that's just terrible, low-effort writing / character design.

Richard (another one-dimensional character) could have also been a threat, but it gets immediately defused because Haley isn't interested in him at all.

In the end the only interesting male character is Victor - and of course he's gay because… reasons.

It also feels like the dev had a basic plot idea, but then didn't pay too much attention to the consistency / details of the story, like:

Dinner at Adriana and Richard
The whole scene felt so out of place… Richard openly hitting on Haley while his wife and her brother are present. The MC talking in an extremely unpleasant way to Adriana, something that should have got him instantly fired. And Adriana, up to this point cool and professional, suddenly swearing and then jerking off the MC under the table. It felt like a scene right out of a JAB comic. "Bizarre, but not in a good way" (© Avaron1974).

At the pool
The girls' skin shines like the MC emptied 2 bottles of sunscreen on them (just to be completely dry again in one of the next renders) - and then out of nowhere he's fondling his sister's boobs. Seriously?

Emergency room
The MC carries his injured sister all the way to the next emergency room. Pretty convenient it's just around the corner, so no driving involved, nope. Haley is totally in pain, but the moment the doc states nothing needs to be done about her ankle (not even ointment and bandage - what kind of doc is she?) Haley's instantly fine again...


Conclusion:

Haley's Story is a visually appealing VN with a charismatic main love interest and some refreshing banter.
Unfortunately, the player gets pretty much railroaded through the story - and choices don't seem to be very meaningful.
On top of that some (especially male) side characters are just poorly written and many story details don't feel very believable.

I must say this VN has everything to become a masterpiece, a classic,really incredible renders and animations, the writing is also a key factor here, absolutely amazing so far, the slow burn with Haley is great, she conquered me so easyly, the only Con i can say for now is the forced relashionship with sandra, i really dont want to be anything but friends with her, you either are nice to her or kinda of a dick, so i hope you can dump her eventually to pursue the other girls, there is absolute no fucking way that i would chose Sandra over Haley, Haley always wins with me.

Excellent story,. Not a game that is going to just instantly throw you in there where you are banging girls left and right. You really feel like these are 2 people working through their hang ups. Might be my personal favorite plot in a story yet.

FINALLY! A sister in an adult game that seems like an actual living, breathing human being with depth of character and a real personality. Haley is probably even better a sister and a better character than an adult game deserves. She's cute and sexy, without having a large boob or an ass, which seems to be the definition of beauty in most adult games. But, you know what, even if she were not cute, I wouldn't even mind, because, as one of my favorite writers once mentioned in one of his books that once you like a person, they start to look more beautiful. The story seems to revolve around her, more focus on her than the MC. So, "Haley's Story" is an appropriate name. Don't see an incest tag, so I'm just anxious that we get to romance her in the end. I can't wait to see where this story goes. Kudos to the developer. You sir/ma'm DO really know how to make a good character.

well well well...how the hell did i miss this gem? after reading the description it reminded me of another twin bro sis game (my sister my roommate...which is a great game btw)...but i dont want to review something by comparing with something else.
this VN is just beautiful...definitely one of the best i have ever played...excellent renders...excellent writing...story is pretty good...the build up is perfect and very realistic...not a bunch of H scenes but enough for now atleast (animations are well made)...also i loved the detail the dev has put into characters...very believable and unique...well what more can one ask? super hyped for how this turns out...
definitely try this one out if you looking for quality a VN

Tbth, I only DL'd because there just seems a be a real slump in decent games coming out recently... I was just looking for something a bit different-ish with decent-ish art and this game popped up in the "New Releases" section. I almost didn't DL it because I thought Haley looked too much like Lizzy Border from the 80's Metal Band \m/ (in the OP title screen)- Note to Dev: That really isn't a flattering picture of her, considering how stunningly she's rendered throughout the rest of the game. She is absolutely gorgeous!

This game is a hidden gem for many reasons, as I found out, and was pleasantly surprised by- yes, even though it's "that" topic. Lol This game actually does something not a lot of the other ones do- they let things happen. There's no talisman, book, potion, alien, pill, demon, wand, etc.,.- it just happens because...it happens.

It's also really refreshing to see the girl instigate things, while the brother is completely oblivious. It's obvious he cares about her and you're presented with some dialogue options that show you care, and then there are some that show you "care+". I really like the way it played out- you're even given the options like you have no interest in her whatsoever... C'mon though, HOW could you say know to that redhaired beauty?! I know I can't watch "Brave" without sportin' a chub. Lol What can I say? Merida replaced Ariel and I didn't even see it coming.

The art is exceptionally well done and so are the renders. The locations actually look like people live/work in those location. They aren't just randomly filled with generic assets to make it look habitable- it looks like people would live in the places. The ladies, oh the ladies are cute, sexy, adorable, and amazing.
Adriana- She's not holding up too badly for a "mature" woman. I'm still unsure about the pro/con of getting the HJ at dinner...
Sandra- Not normally a fan of sistahs, but I wouldn't mind getting "down with swirl" for some of that dark chocolate.
Alana- Hasn't really been given a whole lot to do yet, but she isn't hard on the eyes.
Lisa- She looks/acts like so much damaged goods, but looks/acts like she's be a whole lot of fun.
Diane- (I'm about to become a blasphemer...) She's attractive, but not really into ginormous fun-bags.
Haley- The crown jewel in this game. Even if she were only a side character, she'd still be the one that I'd have to- have to pursue. I think I'm in Love. Lol Haley is just the cutest li'l thing!

Last, but not least- the story is solid with a decent premise, BUT it's how it's written that really makes it stand out from similar games. The banter and interaction between Haley and MC is done really, really well. They act like a brother and sister, maybe if they were still 7 with larger vocabularies- but their dialogue is and sounds believable. What I love the most about it how playful, teasing, coquettish, shy, and fun Haley seems through her words and the renders- and how that attitude is conveyed. If I were planning on going against accepted, established societal norms with my sibling- there is no one I would rather do it with than Haley.

8/10 Another successful project. From the beginning, it looks like you're going to hit the ctrl key, but not. The story draws you. Ideal, simple and exciting. Perfect processing. Again one of the few games that did. Personally, I would add tears to rendering it to weight. Impression is essential. I'm delighted with this game. Whether she's a sister or a roommate. It does not matter. i wanna 3 things.
Add more corruption (incidents)
Better scene or more passionate
And mainly disappointment.
Otherwise, the perfect work of the developer.

The writing is really phenomenal, which matters more than you might expect. I don't just mean that it's natural rather than forced, although that's part of it. I mean that the writer went above and beyond. The characters are written as characters, and not just as plot devices whose purpose is to move the player along towards a satisfyingly erotic ending. For instance, the main character loves Samurai movies—it's a detail that 99% of erotic games would never include, because it's irrelevant to the plot. But I love it.