Well grammarly gave me 80 for that English. If you can and if you want proofread it for free
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I asked you a few questions in private and I think you should put what the future tags are going to be.
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What do you mean Patreon sold devs bro I'm getting just 30 to 60 $ per month bro, who are you calling Patreon sold dev. You are not fair bro
Well my dude rias gemory is just and I like her in anime, so why not I use her in my vn and comes to homework. Your still at start to complete the homework. So it takes time to give u my orginal so u can copy it later (I take inspiration from dxd but I'm copying anything other than names. )
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I was chatting with someone and I mentioned that some developers prefer not to include incest in their games because of patreon , I honestly don't know if that's your case
some even remove the incest by changing the whole script just to meet patreon censorship , this makes us angry
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My brain hurts just from reading the overview and the dev's replies.
Especially this one:
Especially this one:
Bro! (God, I hate that. Especially from a non-English speaker) That reply has absolutely nothing to do with the post you quoted.
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I want to chime in with some words of encouragement, criticism and advice here. I want to see you do well and hope you can take this as well meaning advice instead of someone trying to put you down.
First things first, your art is really good. Having had a browse through your threads here and your Patreon page I'm pretty comfortable in saying that your renders are easily better than over 90% of the games we see on this site, and it really does look like you're both willing and able to put in the work to create interesting settings and characters that are easy on the eye.
Now for the negative stuff that you won't want to hear. I don't think your English is good enough to be writing games. You've misunderstood people's messages here and some of what you've written is quite difficult to understand. This isn't a condemnation, it's obviously not your first language, and you're still better with English than I am with any other language. But it does present a significant hurdle, and one that you'll need to overcome or bypass in order to see any real success. There are a few options I can think of that might be worth considering:
1: Join another project as an artist. This is where your strengths lie, and you'd benefit pretty much any team there.
2: Write in your native language (obviously the financial viability of this depends on the market for your own language)
3: Get a writer or at least a proofreader to work with you. If money is too tight to pay a wage then you might be able to offer a % share of future income. https://f95zone.to/forums/recruitment-services.117/
Now for some miscellaneous advice. This is more opinion based, so take it or leave it. You're obviously quite young, it shows in both the way you communicate here and in the enthusiasm you have to include *all the things* in your projects. I worry you might be biting off more than you can chew with your intentions to make a game of such large scope all by yourself. Even putting aside the language issues for moment, I'd recommend finishing a much smaller project (or several!) before aiming so high. Doing so would both improve your skills and help to build a fanbase willing to support your future work. I'd also suggest just generally narrowing your scope to focus mainly on one or two niches*. This would help you really focus on those areas to the best of your ability and make your work appeal a lot more to fans of those things. Trying to please so many people or include so many things risks the setting getting a bit messy/complicated/generic and limits the speed you can add content relevant to all the different aspects. There's also the fact that a lot of people have quite specific tastes when it comes to porn; having the devil stuff might put off the furries and the furry stuff might put off the devil lovers.
Hopefully I've given you a few things to consider here. Either way, good luck to ya
*Examples of this could be a 'realistic' medieval harem building game, a furry incest game, a fantasy game focused on norse mythology, a scifi bdsm game etc
First things first, your art is really good. Having had a browse through your threads here and your Patreon page I'm pretty comfortable in saying that your renders are easily better than over 90% of the games we see on this site, and it really does look like you're both willing and able to put in the work to create interesting settings and characters that are easy on the eye.
Now for the negative stuff that you won't want to hear. I don't think your English is good enough to be writing games. You've misunderstood people's messages here and some of what you've written is quite difficult to understand. This isn't a condemnation, it's obviously not your first language, and you're still better with English than I am with any other language. But it does present a significant hurdle, and one that you'll need to overcome or bypass in order to see any real success. There are a few options I can think of that might be worth considering:
1: Join another project as an artist. This is where your strengths lie, and you'd benefit pretty much any team there.
2: Write in your native language (obviously the financial viability of this depends on the market for your own language)
3: Get a writer or at least a proofreader to work with you. If money is too tight to pay a wage then you might be able to offer a % share of future income. https://f95zone.to/forums/recruitment-services.117/
Now for some miscellaneous advice. This is more opinion based, so take it or leave it. You're obviously quite young, it shows in both the way you communicate here and in the enthusiasm you have to include *all the things* in your projects. I worry you might be biting off more than you can chew with your intentions to make a game of such large scope all by yourself. Even putting aside the language issues for moment, I'd recommend finishing a much smaller project (or several!) before aiming so high. Doing so would both improve your skills and help to build a fanbase willing to support your future work. I'd also suggest just generally narrowing your scope to focus mainly on one or two niches*. This would help you really focus on those areas to the best of your ability and make your work appeal a lot more to fans of those things. Trying to please so many people or include so many things risks the setting getting a bit messy/complicated/generic and limits the speed you can add content relevant to all the different aspects. There's also the fact that a lot of people have quite specific tastes when it comes to porn; having the devil stuff might put off the furries and the furry stuff might put off the devil lovers.
Hopefully I've given you a few things to consider here. Either way, good luck to ya
*Examples of this could be a 'realistic' medieval harem building game, a furry incest game, a fantasy game focused on norse mythology, a scifi bdsm game etc
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good to know guess il be seeing my way out
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I'm not trying to shit on you, and I can get wanting a fresh start with everything you've learned. But there is one core thing that must change or this will, in my opinion, never be truly successful. That is the English.
Other people have already pointed it out, and after checking out your other game, it seems as though it was an issue there as well. You clearly want to tell a story. You have ideas. That's great. However, none of that matters if the large majority of you audience can't understand it (as in this site, as it is primarily English). This doubles for a visual novel, when writing and plot are typically very important.
You are not even close to the first dev that doesn't primarily speak English, and I can tell you from the many games I've checked out on this site that it will always be an issue for some people unless corrected. It doesn't even have to be completely coherent to be good, but from the posts on this thread alone your translations are a little rough to put it nicely. I don't mean to sound like a dick, but that's sort of the reality of the site. Speaking as one guy, I have very little patience these days to play a game that's a jumbled mess of bad translation.
Regardless, I wish you luck. You clearly do have some talent with renders. I'd always rather see a game turn itself around than be abandoned.
Well, if you think my game potential and it can be a good game with English fixes make my patron reach $150 by the end of this 25 th I will 3 parts money ($115) to proofread it by best guys I know, they really know how to write stuff, that is all I can say just a bet, if turns out well, the guy who become patron is happy while playing the vn and I'm happy it is success or you guys go away with 1 month patrons. in both ways I'm losing money, even though I put much hard work
choice is urs guys whether support me for a month or just jokes on me
choice is urs guys whether support me for a month or just jokes on me
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Don't know about this one. But another new game that isn't based on honey select or genshin impact graphics is a welcome sight.
can we rename the MC? Never heard of a male named Dream before.
- Sep 3, 2017
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I'll leave out most of the..."critique"...I had planned and just say this :
Dear Dev, you should have an Options / Preferences button on the main menu page when the game loads (especially if you make a game with music), and side menu options off to the left or right when right-click is used.
Dear Dev, you should have an Options / Preferences button on the main menu page when the game loads (especially if you make a game with music), and side menu options off to the left or right when right-click is used.
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- Dec 9, 2017
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Man whats this a highschool dxd anime made into a avn
Rias gremory making apppearance
And the mc is a poor excuse of Issei
Rias gremory making apppearance
And the mc is a poor excuse of Issei