With this setting this looks like it has a lot of potential. So here is a little feedback:
- Way too much text. Nobody likes reading things that appear to have no relevance. Try to keep it as concise and on the point. The player is a lot more willing to read text after some relation to a character has been established. And this is not the case at this phase of the game. Also, is the text even skippable?
- More save points. I suppose right now the only save point is at the map selection screen.
- It indeed creates curiousity for the player if not everything is explained right away. But e. g. the sudden falling in love with the pink haired girl comes totally out of the blue.
- and finally: If this is an erotic game, where is the sexual parts? There is actually just a lot of light foreplay that may serve players with a severe softcore fetish. But what players of erotic games do in fact enjoy are erotic scenes (no brainer...). For instance, look at darktoz's games where the vast majory of the gameplay deals with a sweet built up to climax. Just an example of what people enjoy. Does not mean that you need to serve close-ups of penises and vaginas all the time. But at this point there have been no explicit images at all, disappointingly.
- Way too much text. Nobody likes reading things that appear to have no relevance. Try to keep it as concise and on the point. The player is a lot more willing to read text after some relation to a character has been established. And this is not the case at this phase of the game. Also, is the text even skippable?
- More save points. I suppose right now the only save point is at the map selection screen.
- It indeed creates curiousity for the player if not everything is explained right away. But e. g. the sudden falling in love with the pink haired girl comes totally out of the blue.
- and finally: If this is an erotic game, where is the sexual parts? There is actually just a lot of light foreplay that may serve players with a severe softcore fetish. But what players of erotic games do in fact enjoy are erotic scenes (no brainer...). For instance, look at darktoz's games where the vast majory of the gameplay deals with a sweet built up to climax. Just an example of what people enjoy. Does not mean that you need to serve close-ups of penises and vaginas all the time. But at this point there have been no explicit images at all, disappointingly.
