VN Ren'Py Abandoned Rolando Dumbo? [v0.032] [Abdul Kumpain]

[UncleVT]

They're not paintings, these are pictures with brightness and saturation fucked to the max with an outline filter. These kind of projects make me wish Patreon had some kind of quality control.

YES! We need more censorship in Patreon.

 

[JustNotFatal]

I haven't played the game but the "Staff Note: Do not turn this into a shit show. You have been warned." made it worth the click as soon as I figured out the parody focus.

Edit: The brightness/saturation has to be the most unsettling visual I have seen in awhile.

 

[shinonen]

Summertime Saga inserted a Trump parody and it completely turned my stomach.

Politics aside, his face is antithetical to me jerking it to porn games. I can't back this, sorry. Good luck, though.

 

[operaxx]

ok lets try

 

[Maddick]

Look how afraid some people are to even touch this game... If the goverment was on your neck you would have been arrested for a couple different things just by creating an account on this side. Its an private porn project, nothing more. So, calm your tits a bit people. As for me, I will wait for ca. 10 more updates to look into it. But the filter-effects for the model on the example images looking a bit to much... Too bright, too blurry. They are giving me bit headache.

 

[Abdulkump]

Summertime Saga inserted a Trump parody and it completely turned my stomach.

Politics aside, his face is antithetical to me jerking it to porn games. I can't back this, sorry. Good luck, though.

It's first person so you won't see the protagonist's face (who is not even Trump). You just gave the idea of how a bad end will be... looking into a mirror!

 

[Abdulkump]

I looked at the Download size, and saw how small it was, and said, what the hell why not....

Okay... it's very badly done so far. Here is my constructive criticism.

The concept is not a bad one by any means. In fact it is a good idea for a parody adult game. Here is what I found wrong with it.

1) Serious need of proofreading. Bad spelling, and punctuation especially the over use of the exclamation point. For instance it says "Good morning secretary!" Not something to be exclaimed...

2) The words Trump speaks are not ones he would be likely to say. "Just write Mr President with bad handwriting on all of them!" Even if Trump does have bad hand writing, and he passes this off to his secretary for some reason... he would say something like "Write Mr. President with great hand writing, just like mine, on all of them." Trump is not really one to use self deprecation, and is known to be a braggart.

3) The art is virtually non existent. These strange colors created by bad photo shop filters is just awful. There are a total of 9 images, 3 of which are backgrounds. It would be less awful on the eyes if they just made it gray scale...

4) Trump sounds like a numbskull ghetto rat at times... saying stuff like; "If all goes well, this shit gon be real fun..." That's NOT how Trump has ever talked... If he were to express the same sentiment it would go something like "All will go well as expected. This will be great." Trump never uses "if" in ANY of his plans... It's a certainty. No "if"s! He does not ever speak with any doubts, right or wrong. If is a doubtful word, and trump is not a doubtful person when speaking of himself, or his plans.

5) Trump is way too much of an asshole to be believable when talking to his wife, especially in front of his daughter.

6) The concept of Trump having some sort of boss whose ass he kisses is laughable. As is the concept of him being some sort of secret agent, or spy. Has anyone ever seen Trump kiss anyone's ass?

7) The time frame of it being the start of his 2nd term is not necessary, and rather anti-climactic from a storytellers perspective. It would have made FAR more sense to set the time frame at the start of the next election cycle. That could be a story. Does he do something sleazy with a whore on the campaign trail, or is he good boy? Does he dig for dirt on his opponents, what does he find? Does he make some outrageous statements at a rally? There are way more possibilities along this storyline where as he could get re-elected or ridiculed.

8) It lacks options. The simple choice of blowing off meeting the wife, and daughter ends the game... Perhaps a better option here would have been: Greet the wife, and daughter gracefully, or with rudeness.

9) Lack of content, very short, and what's there is shit.

10) It's lacking in all areas.

First of all, there is no character (including the protagonist) named Trump. Then, I don't know about you but games and VNs start from a low point. Thanks for constructive criticism anyway.

 

[SlwE]

First of all, there is no character (including the protagonist) named Trump. Then, I don't know about you but games and VNs start from a low point. Thanks for constructive criticism anyway.

Just leave Trump out and make it purely fictional... then nobody will talk about politics here and it could turn into a nice porn parody. But making the MC looking like an actual politician only means trouble and soon the end of the game. The same goes for any country the "agent" serves. Make it purely fictional as well, e.g. name the country "Republic of Nomania" or something silly.

 

[Abdulkump]

Would black and white be preferred?

 

[Abdulkump]

0.032 Demo - In black&white

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Changelog 0.032:
- 2 new scenes
- 5 new images
- Change of colours

In future versions (would greatly appreciate suggestions):
- Adding point-based system
- Sandbox-style features
- Way more images and scenes
- Improving the art

 

[Prokopije]

Well, storyline is tempting. Let's see how thigns will go in future.

 

[Thrownaway13]

OP Updated

 

[Abdulkump]

Please check out the

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. I would love to know about your various opinions there.

 

[Deleted member 50069]

I really like idea of creating adult political game. I'm having something similar to this in mind, however as always in our creations it would contain female protagonist and probably rpgm.
However for this one I really keep thumbs up for future updates.

 

[Abdulkump]

I really like idea of creating adult political game. I'm having something similar to this in mind, however as always in our creations it would contain female protagonist and probably rpgm.
However for this one I really keep thumbs up for future updates.

If you want, check out the polling thread (link above) and leave suggestions and ideas. It's always good to hear from other developers!

 

[botc76]

2 new scenes and 5 new images as a whole update.
Yeah, I'll check this out again in a year or so.

 

[abcd65926]

This is an even more pathetic attempt at grabbing patreon bucks than Pointy Club

 

[Thjis]

Just not a good idea to make a political parody that appears to based on a real person. It will ignite a lot of disputes as it is developed.

 

[treos]

*reads description* oh gods... whatever you do, NO ONE tell CNN about this game. lol they won't fact check it or anything and just use it as ammo against trump like they always do.

edit: i'm joking of course. well...kinda.

 

[taopaipai]

mmmmm trump you say?