VN Ren'Py New Year's Day(e) [Ch. 4 v0.4.1] [Jonesy]

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Sanholo45

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I wrote the and have continued with New Years Daye. I've removed any step references and added or changed dialogue to make a blood relation between the MC, Eve and Daye explicit.

I've also Incorporated m0us3r's age change function.

Edit: Updated for 0.4.1
Am I missing something here? This patch does not seem to remove step family references?
 

hashcheckin

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I've said the same thing repeatedly. It never ceases to amaze me the number of highly qualified literary critics, moderators of morality, professors of quality AVN writing, mavens of judicial knowledge and self proclaimed rocket scientists that use their highly in-demand time and expertise here on a pirate porn site trying to educate developers on how their work is flawed. Particularly since my best guess is that the greater majority of these experts are basement dwelling Cartmans waiting for a hot pocket from momma.
A lot of people don't seem to understand the difference between media criticism and a customer service complaint.

If you don't like how a visual novel's story is shaping up, fine. If you don't like it and you demand that it changes, you've misunderstood how this works.
 

Sugoda77

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Good! I was hoping people would find her chatter endearing more than annoying. She's your quintessential flighty chatterbox girl. I love her!
My only gripe with her is it felt rushed with her character. He met her at the diner, later walked her to the bikini store and now she's wearing lingerie and considering giving herself to someone she's known less than a few days. I know she's sheltered and curious but it doesn't feel like natural progression.
 

*Jonesy*

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My only gripe with her is it felt rushed with her character. He met her at the diner, later walked her to the bikini store and now she's wearing lingerie and considering giving herself to someone she's known less than a few days. I know she's sheltered and curious but it doesn't feel like natural progression.
That's fair. I guess in my mind I figured Kim had been teaching her a thing or two "off camera". But I get why it might feel rushed when it comes to the MC and his fam.
 

Havik79

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Was a good update, but yeah Chelsea felt a bit rushed, but still good, except the ending, I hate cliffhangers, but when you know what is going to happen it just makes it dumb.
 

Sugoda77

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That's fair. I guess in my mind I figured Kim had been teaching her a thing or two "off camera". But I get why it might feel rushed when it comes to the MC and his fam.
Yeah, I understand trying to fit everything into the story and develop relationships is tough so I'm not sure of a good solution to it. if she had been a family friend for some time and the MC knew her prior that might make it feel more organic if she had a long standing crush like Kaylee has. With the girls being her surrogate for entering the harem cult.
 

*Jonesy*

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Yeah, I understand trying to fit everything into the story and develop relationships is tough so I'm not sure of a good solution to it. if she had been a family friend for some time and the MC knew her prior that might make it feel more organic if she had a long standing crush like Kaylee has. With the girls being her surrogate for entering the harem cult.
I'm thinking of a fix for this that I can put into chapter 5. Like, maybe a convo between MC and [insert character name] that will explain it all a little better than just..."and then Chelsea is there."
 
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Sugoda77

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I'm thinking of a fix for this that I can put into chapter 5. Like, maybe a convo between MC and [insert character name] that will explain it all a little better than just..."and then Chelsea is there."
Maybe some past connection with Heather and Chelsea's parents could work. Heather seeing how overbearing they are with her and she takes a moment to instill some words of wisdom on her that's related to the girls and the MC. I don't know, but I appreciate the consideration. Enjoying your work.
 
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