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The voices aren't AI apart from Phanta's Dad (a side character who only appears for one event)The voices are far from lifelike too.
Thank you for the very, very, detailed feedback! I am just a one-person team so it's hard to catch dialogue errors since I wrote the dialogue and tend to gloss over my own errors. Definitely will improve upon and try to fix many of these in the next update, I appreciate you taking the time to be critical but constructive at the same time <3This is pretty good so far. Though not without problems.
The voicing of the characters is quite good. I actually kept them on for this game, which I almost never do. Some lines in the early parts of the game get very quiet near the end though, especially for Azazel. Even a couple of her later ones seem to just stop short, turning 'teach' into 'tea', for example.
Some of the CG's are comically wrong in detail. I'm not talking about weird hands or anything like that. What I mean is MC cooking pasta and chicken for Josa and the CG showing her eating a sandwich. Another example is MC and Azazel running around the block and the CG showing a racetrack in the background.
The narration is mostly in present tense, but sometimes switches to past tense for no discernible reason.
After the choice during Phanta's first tutoring session, the MC's answer is not labeled as spoken by the MC (whichever answer you picked). The same thing happens later during the phonecall with Phanta.
At the end of Josa's second session, it seems like you walk her to the door, then after that you both agree to end the session. That's just weird.
Maybe I'm not hearing it right, but Josa's line, "C'mon, one more song!" is voiced as "C'mon, one per song!" (or something similar).
Finally, here's my rather thorough list of errors in the script. A large amount of these are missing punctuation, many of which are vocative commas. I actually went through everything this time, but no guarantees that I found everything.
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Anyway, I'm looking forward to seeing the rest.
There's about an hour worth of content if you go through everything at a normal pace. In total, there's 10 events in total for each girl and one school event. Will definitely be a lot more content in future updates!Art looks awesome! How much content is there on v0.1.1?
10 events each! Woah normally there's 2-3 total event at that versionThere's about an hour worth of content if you go through everything at a normal pace. In total, there's 10 events in total for each girl and one school event. Will definitely be a lot more content in future updates!
Oh, my wording was off! 10 events total between all girls, so each girl has like 4 events each. Sorry >_<10 events each! Woah normally there's 2-3 total event at that version
I'll give it a shot thanks!
Makes more sense haha. Still good!Oh, my wording was off! 10 events total between all girls, so each girl has like 4 events each. Sorry >_<
Hope you enjoy!!
Took a good hour indeed! Awesome work! I've let a review, this game will surely pop off once more people know more about it. The quality is higher than more visual novel / dating games in here.There's about an hour worth of content if you go through everything at a normal pace. In total, there's 10 events in total for each girl and one school event. Will definitely be a lot more content in future updates!
Thank you so much, I just read your review and it made me very happy!! Will definitely take your feedback and implement it into the next update. Hope you return for future updates <3Took a good hour indeed! Awesome work! I've let a review, this game will surely pop off once more people know more about it. The quality is higher than more visual novel / dating games in here.
I love the red theme, but I've suggest adding more contrast on the text when the love is +1 and during the intro scene.
Good luck on the game, will surely come back for further updates. Really curious how you'll craft the world with this setting. Lots of opportunities!