Ren'Py Abandoned Fuck Time [v0.3] [KIFT]

[KIFT]

Am i the only one who has no fucking clue of what to do.

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[KIFT]

As mentioned by others, Princess Bubblegum just seems out of place.
Judging from the title art you drew everyone exactly how they look on the show, except Princess Bubblegum. It's fine if you want to take the art in your own direction but it needs to stay consistent.

Other than that as long as you keep going strong with this game I feel like you could easily get massive Patreon support because Adventure Time is one of those untouched gold mines in adult games. Sureeee there is that 3D game but I feel people were waiting for a game like this to come along.

I have already responded to such a comment. In short, I did not change the PB at will, and did it for the sake of the plot

 

[KIFT]

help I do not know how to start

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First, try to start the game again and read all the dialogues, then you will be very clear what to do
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I hope you will succeed!

 

[KIFT]

yes but how the fuck do you get money to make sandwiches if you start with no money idiot

Don't swear!
When you talk to the BMO, and realize that you need sandwiches, and you have no money for the recipe, just talk to the goose, selecting in the dialogue "sandwich recipe" and maybe he will make concessions
In no case do not call other people idiots, if you do not understand something I hope you will succeed!

 

[KIFT]

Thank you for leaving feedback and comments to my game. I will try to answer all the questions! Many thanks to those who support me on "PATREON". I adore you all <3

 

[Violet5100]

Don't swear!

In no case do not call other people idiots, if you do not understand something I hope you will succeed!

Before I say anything, I want you to know I don't disagree with you on your stance here. However I do find it really hilarious to see the particular wording and execution you took while writing that.

Haven't tried the game just yet, and going to try it now. I'm usually a bit apprehensive of playing porn parody games of shows I really like, but I'm curious so I'm going to give it a try. Will post my thoughts on it once I play it.

 

[Violet5100]

Alright, I played it to the end.

It's... Not my cup of tea. The slightly broken english aside, As well as my bias about porn parody games of shows and things I normally enjoy...

It really wasn't that great. It seemed very forced, and took weird directions. The characters seemed like they came out of ice-king's slash fiction and unless that was the intent... I don't think it's a good thing. PBG really doesn't look that great to me after the first story bit and I felt the only reason I even continued playing was to say that I played the whole thing through. I didn't really know what to do at first since the direction wasn't very clear. It wasn't exactly clear at all I needed to everyone around before asking about the sandwich recipe. Fin's face was also a bit ill-fitting at times, as he would be smiling like a madman in some dialog and it felt really weird. A few additional face images might help this a lot... As for the day by day system, it's so damn short! Not to mention the fact that if I wanted to call PBG, it took the only other part of the day I could do anything.

It feels less than an alpha and more of a tech-demo or proof of concept. I didn't read the description at all, so I'm not sure if that was stated or not. To be honest this feels like an artist has a concept but no programmer or story designer. All-in-all I'd say that the art itself and the image quality are more than okay, but as a game? It's pretty bad. Worth checking up on now and then if you're really into it. It isn't terrible like some games, but it's not exactly great.

With my own bias injected into this now, I honestly do think PBG after the potion looks ugly AF. She lost every quality I liked about her and lost everything visually appealing about her. Finn is written like a rapist, and the self-introduction of your own persona as god is extremely... Ehhh... I mentioned this already but just for all these reasons it makes me feel like an episode of really badly written ice-king fan-fiction. The broken english really killed my mood to several times, but I can't fault you for that and nobody else should. Not every person on the planet knows amazing english, so I give you a pass on that. I feel maybe there should also be good and bad routes to the story. Maybe a route where you DO take full advantage of PBG and turn her into a uh... " " " sexual looking sex addict " " " (Which I know some like, but I reeeeeally think is super unattractive.) or another route where you win her over with kindness and persuade her to do the acts of her own free will. It's small things like this that make a game really good to me. The ability to choose what exactly your intentions are and openly explore the outcomes of different actions. /ESPECIALLY/ in games of this genre.

TLDR: I think it's very "Ice-king slash fiction" feeling, but the art is good enough. I don't like it, but I think some might. Worth a look if you're interested.

PS to author: Please don't take this review as a jab at your abilities. I think that you put a considerable amount of work into this and that alone is worth a praise. Your sexually appealing qualities in people isn't going to be the same as mine and I'm not going to hold that against you. For what it is, and probably what resources you had at your disposal, this is a pretty good game. I hope you continue to work on this.


Quick note: Did you use the word "Tom" specifically for humor reasons, or did you not know it's a "Tome" with an e? I found it cute that he says tom, but if you weren't going for that... You may wanna like touch that up a bit.

 

[rspkers]

Alright, I played it to the end.

It's... Not my cup of tea. The slightly broken english aside, As well as my bias about porn parody games of shows and things I normally enjoy...

It really wasn't that great. It seemed very forced, and took weird directions. The characters seemed like they came out of ice-king's slash fiction and unless that was the intent... I don't think it's a good thing. PBG really doesn't look that great to me after the first story bit and I felt the only reason I even continued playing was to say that I played the whole thing through. I didn't really know what to do at first since the direction wasn't very clear. It wasn't exactly clear at all I needed to everyone around before asking about the sandwich recipe. Fin's face was also a bit ill-fitting at times, as he would be smiling like a madman in some dialog and it felt really weird. A few additional face images might help this a lot... As for the day by day system, it's so damn short! Not to mention the fact that if I wanted to call PBG, it took the only other part of the day I could do anything.

It feels less than an alpha and more of a tech-demo or proof of concept. I didn't read the description at all, so I'm not sure if that was stated or not. To be honest this feels like an artist has a concept but no programmer or story designer. All-in-all I'd say that the art itself and the image quality are more than okay, but as a game? It's pretty bad. Worth checking up on now and then if you're really into it. It isn't terrible like some games, but it's not exactly great.

With my own bias injected into this now, I honestly do think PBG after the potion looks ugly AF. She lost every quality I liked about her and lost everything visually appealing about her. Finn is written like a rapist, and the self-introduction of your own persona as god is extremely... Ehhh... I mentioned this already but just for all these reasons it makes me feel like an episode of really badly written ice-king fan-fiction. The broken english really killed my mood to several times, but I can't fault you for that and nobody else should. Not every person on the planet knows amazing english, so I give you a pass on that. I feel maybe there should also be good and bad routes to the story. Maybe a route where you DO take full advantage of PBG and turn her into a uh... " " " sexual looking sex addict " " " (Which I know some like, but I reeeeeally think is super unattractive.) or another route where you win her over with kindness and persuade her to do the acts of her own free will. It's small things like this that make a game really good to me. The ability to choose what exactly your intentions are and openly explore the outcomes of different actions. /ESPECIALLY/ in games of this genre.

TLDR: I think it's very "Ice-king slash fiction" feeling, but the art is good enough. I don't like it, but I think some might. Worth a look if you're interested.

PS to author: Please don't take this review as a jab at your abilities. I think that you put a considerable amount of work into this and that alone is worth a praise. Your sexually appealing qualities in people isn't going to be the same as mine and I'm not going to hold that against you. For what it is, and probably what resources you had at your disposal, this is a pretty good game. I hope you continue to work on this.


Quick note: Did you use the word "Tom" specifically for humor reasons, or did you not know it's a "Tome" with an e? I found it cute that he says tom, but if you weren't going for that... You may wanna like touch that up a bit.

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[Violet5100]

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[KIFT]

Alright, I played it to the end.

It's... Not my cup of tea. The slightly broken english aside, As well as my bias about porn parody games of shows and things I normally enjoy...

It really wasn't that great. It seemed very forced, and took weird directions. The characters seemed like they came out of ice-king's slash fiction and unless that was the intent... I don't think it's a good thing. PBG really doesn't look that great to me after the first story bit and I felt the only reason I even continued playing was to say that I played the whole thing through. I didn't really know what to do at first since the direction wasn't very clear. It wasn't exactly clear at all I needed to everyone around before asking about the sandwich recipe. Fin's face was also a bit ill-fitting at times, as he would be smiling like a madman in some dialog and it felt really weird. A few additional face images might help this a lot... As for the day by day system, it's so damn short! Not to mention the fact that if I wanted to call PBG, it took the only other part of the day I could do anything.

It feels less than an alpha and more of a tech-demo or proof of concept. I didn't read the description at all, so I'm not sure if that was stated or not. To be honest this feels like an artist has a concept but no programmer or story designer. All-in-all I'd say that the art itself and the image quality are more than okay, but as a game? It's pretty bad. Worth checking up on now and then if you're really into it. It isn't terrible like some games, but it's not exactly great.

With my own bias injected into this now, I honestly do think PBG after the potion looks ugly AF. She lost every quality I liked about her and lost everything visually appealing about her. Finn is written like a rapist, and the self-introduction of your own persona as god is extremely... Ehhh... I mentioned this already but just for all these reasons it makes me feel like an episode of really badly written ice-king fan-fiction. The broken english really killed my mood to several times, but I can't fault you for that and nobody else should. Not every person on the planet knows amazing english, so I give you a pass on that. I feel maybe there should also be good and bad routes to the story. Maybe a route where you DO take full advantage of PBG and turn her into a uh... " " " sexual looking sex addict " " " (Which I know some like, but I reeeeeally think is super unattractive.) or another route where you win her over with kindness and persuade her to do the acts of her own free will. It's small things like this that make a game really good to me. The ability to choose what exactly your intentions are and openly explore the outcomes of different actions. /ESPECIALLY/ in games of this genre.

TLDR: I think it's very "Ice-king slash fiction" feeling, but the art is good enough. I don't like it, but I think some might. Worth a look if you're interested.

PS to author: Please don't take this review as a jab at your abilities. I think that you put a considerable amount of work into this and that alone is worth a praise. Your sexually appealing qualities in people isn't going to be the same as mine and I'm not going to hold that against you. For what it is, and probably what resources you had at your disposal, this is a pretty good game. I hope you continue to work on this.


Quick note: Did you use the word "Tom" specifically for humor reasons, or did you not know it's a "Tome" with an e? I found it cute that he says tom, but if you weren't going for that... You may wanna like touch that up a bit.

1) Everyone should have his own opinion.
2) You need to be able to perceive criticism.
Some of what you said was a matter of taste.
What you said about the "bad story of the Ice King" maybe you're right about something (won't be a spoiler)
But the only thing I agree with 100% is my English... When I have more followers, I'll hire someone to edit the text.
You have not taken into account the fact that this is not a fan fiction on "AT", this is a hentai game based on .
In any case, thank you very much for what you have passed the game and do not be lazy to write such a large and detailed comment <3

 

[WeirdRober]

Kift the game seems interesting but the intro is so messy and hard to get past that it's more of a shore than a game

 

[Violet5100]

1) Everyone should have his own opinion.
2) You need to be able to perceive criticism.
Some of what you said was a matter of taste.
What you said about the "bad story of the Ice King" maybe you're right about something (won't be a spoiler)
But the only thing I agree with 100% is my English... When I have more followers, I'll hire someone to edit the text.
You have not taken into account the fact that this is not a fan fiction on "AT", this is a hentai game based on .
In any case, thank you very much for what you have passed the game and do not be lazy to write such a large and detailed comment <3

I did point out several times that a lot of my criticisms were based on bias. I kept that in mind when I typed my review. Also what do you mean by "Lazy"? I very much tried to not be lazy about it and cover a lot of bases about the style, story, writing, and general feel of the game. Maybe I'm missing some sarcasm or hinted joke?

I get it now. You phrased that a bit odd, but after reading it a couple times I got what you were saying.

Also, Yes. Yes I did take into account this isn't a fan-fiction and in fact a hentai game. That's why I think that it's really weird that it does in fact play and read like really /BAD/ fan-fiction.

 

[Violet5100]

Also if you have a script of each line, I can always polish the english off in it for you as a public service.

 

[Setosu]

Violet5100 really hit the nail on the head, pretty much exactly my thoughts. Well written review.

@KIFT
It's great that you are here actively listening to what people are saying but I feel like you have a very strong stance on not changing how PB looks. It's your game so you can do what you want, but judging from most of the comments here a majority of the people don't like the look. If you're looking to gain more Patreons sometimes you just got to do what the fans want, not all the time mind you, because the customer is definitely not always right. I would suggest you at least hold a vote on your Patreon now that your game has gained some exposure here and ask what art style they would like PB in. If not that then maybe have an option for the player to switch art styles.
P.S - If you do need help with the writing I would be open to help. I do want this game to succeed and it can but again, you got to be open to what your supporters want.

 

[Violet5100]

Violet5100 really hit the nail on the head, pretty much exactly my thoughts. Well written review.

@KIFT
It's great that you are here actively listening to what people are saying but I feel like you have a very strong stance on not changing how PB looks. It's your game so you can do what you want, but judging from most of the comments here a majority of the people don't like the look. If you're looking to gain more Patreons sometimes you just got to do what the fans want, not all the time mind you, because the customer is definitely not always right. I would suggest you at least hold a vote on your Patreon now that your game has gained some exposure here and ask what art style they would like PB in. If not that then maybe have an option for the player to switch art styles.
P.S - If you do need help with the writing I would be open to help. I do want this game to succeed and it can but again, you got to be open to what your supporters want.

You know, I didn't know that PB's look was a common point of critique. I thought it was just me... lol
Also, Thanks! I try to be pretty fair about my reviews as well as cover most points with and without bias or personal opinions. I also wholeheartedly agree here, @KIFT . You need to at least hold a vote on your patreon about changing things like PB's look after the potion. I feel the body isn't that bad, but on PB? Ehhhhhhhh.... I probably don't speak for everyone, but we love PB's look normally for reasons not focused around her chest and ass but the way she looks like she was sculpted and polished. Smooth, soft curves with a hint of feminine humanity in there. I'm not sure I can exactly put it into words, but I know why I personally like PB's physique.

Anyway, not to piggy-back here. Thanks again for the complement, Setosu. Actually it's kinda nice to be told I make good reviews once in a while. ^_^

 

[KIFT]

You know, I didn't know that PB's look was a common point of critique. I thought it was just me... lol
Also, Thanks! I try to be pretty fair about my reviews as well as cover most points with and without bias or personal opinions. I also wholeheartedly agree here, @KIFT . You need to at least hold a vote on your patreon about changing things like PB's look after the potion. I feel the body isn't that bad, but on PB? Ehhhhhhhh.... I probably don't speak for everyone, but we love PB's look normally for reasons not focused around her chest and ass but the way she looks like she was sculpted and polished. Smooth, soft curves with a hint of feminine humanity in there. I'm not sure I can exactly put it into words, but I know why I personally like PB's physique.

Anyway, not to piggy-back here. Thanks again for the complement, Setosu. Actually it's kinda nice to be told I make good reviews once in a while. ^_^

You were definitely on

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If you've seen enough of my messages, you may know that this isn't the Princess ' first appearance(All photos attached). At first I thought she would turn into a little Princess, but I had to give up the idea because the character I was drawing on a date seemed cute but not very balanced, which led to problems with the pattern without clothes.
And once again, this is not the first and not the last appearance of the Princess. You do not know how the story goes on, in my game everything is possible. I listen to my patrons and those who support me
But even the first image of the Princess I had to edit(and almost all locations, too )

 

[Violet5100]

You were definitely on

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If you've seen enough of my messages, you may know that this isn't the Princess ' first appearance(All photos attached). At first I thought she would turn into a little Princess, but I had to give up the idea because the character I was drawing on a date seemed cute but not very balanced, which led to problems with the pattern without clothes.
And once again, this is not the first and not the last appearance of the Princess. You do not know how the story goes on, in my game everything is possible. I listen to my patrons and those who support me
But even the first image of the Princess I had to edit(and almost all locations, too )

Alright but none of this changes the fact that people don't exactly like the current revision of her. I feel like you're really trying to attach a really ill-fitting aspect of sexuality to her rather than using her own natural beauty. You can't make a hentai care-bear by strapping DD tits on it and calling it a day. If you want to hentai-ificate something properly take the art direction away from the source to suit the needs. That includes /ALL/ art direction and not just one or two aspects.

Another thing is that her breasts are TOO extenuated(?*) in almost all those images except the most recent one. Perhaps make her dress around her new breasts to be a bit more taunt but not... tight. Make her cleavage more of the center of the player's view instead of the diameter of her breasts. If you want her to be small, perhaps think that she wouldn't have breasts at all since she'd be in essence loli-ificated. I mean, Finn is already a young teen boy who qualifies as a shota already, so the leap in logic here isn't too insane. I'd actually like to point out that maybe since her body expands and grows depending on candy mass... So those lolipops you gift her can always go into making her assets larger instead of the potion itself.

I also feel as if you don't totally understand exactly what I'm trying to say since you're responding to me very strangely... I think I know what you're trying to say, but what you're reacting to and responding to aren't related to what we, the fans/customers are trying to say.

Learn the difference between hyper-sexualizing an already streamlined art style of the show, and actually making a hentai-ificated character. I think as soon as you grasp that, you'll be able to provide a much better and more visually pleasing game.

In addition: No, I wasn't on your patreon page, but rather going by the other person who commented and mentioned that the people/fans/customers don't like the current state PB is in.

 

[Violet5100]

There's a fine balance between your patreons and their wants vs the entire rest of the demographic interested. You can get a few patreons no matter what you put out as long as the quality is at least /OKAY/ but to really grasp patreons, you need to listen to all others involved. I know in it's current state, I don't think you can honestly provide me a game with a visually pleasing setting. PB looks really... off-putting and kinda ugly, and if this is your third remake of her? I don't think you fully grasp the idea of what people want just yet. I'm going to want to spend my hard earned cash on somebody or something I want and know I'm going to like than taking a risk and sinking $50 or so into something I probably won't like. I respect you being active, but if you don't listen to anyone but the people you WANT to hear than there's nothing more to discuss.

I'm going to say for now this is my last post here, but if you have something more to say I'd be happy to discuss this in PMs.

Good luck in your game and I wish you the best.

 

[Setosu]

Your game did not have the same kind of exposure it does now when you did that survey. It's like..when you did that survey you only had a small room of people. Now that you've posted the game here you have a stadium full of people. I can understand that it could be frustrating to switch back and forth so I can see why you are reluctant to do another vote/survey. From what you posted you certainly have artistic talent and wouldn't have to do much to make a change. If you did another vote and people still want the PB you have now then more power to you.

 

[Choronzon11]

Things were going well until the princess transformation...what a buzzkill that was.

The rest of the game could use a bit more direction, but it is still able to be salvaged.

I think the detail I like most about the game is that finn is holding that 'tom' upside down.