VN Ren'Py Alice: A Hard Life [Ep1 v1.5] [Caylake]

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baka

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odd English, inconsistent and typos.
the English need to improve or the game will remain in b-level.
the inconsistency could be fixed if the writer is good enough, otherwise u need testers that helps with that and the typos.
the coder need to fix those inbetween "need to press space" to continue when theres nothing.
later in the game u get that "b-level" story so maybe better to not do anything, b-level is like this so why bother?
 
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Golomolo

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Not a bad start! Quite a bit of grammatical and typo errors but still story seems to be progressing nicely.
 

TomUK

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Got to be honest, definitely got some AWAM vibes at the school, part time teacher, two trouble makers that sit at the back of the class, one white one black, and we know that blackmail will be used somewhere along the lines, goody kid that teacher likes that gets bullied by them, smarmy male teacher in 'teachers room', black janitor and his wanton gaze on Alice. Even if it is, just hope it's done a bit better and Alice actually gets some sex out of it.
 
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ihl86

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Got to be honest, definitely got some AWAM vibes at the school, part time teacher, two trouble makers that sit at the back of the class, one white one black, and we know that blackmail will be used somewhere along the lines, goody kid that teacher likes that gets bullied by them, smarmy male teacher in 'teachers room', black janitor and his wanton gaze on Alice. Even if it is, just hope it's done a bit better and Alice actually gets some sex out of it.
Only just vibes? The whole plot point is copied from there.
 

Alley_Cat

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No and a lot younger as well.
So not much to do with the plot of AWAM at all, considering the focus on incest in the Filthy route. The whole point of the blackmail in AWAM is to protect her son. Without kids, there can be none of that here.
 
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TomUK

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So not much to do with the plot of AWAM at all, considering the focus on incest in the Filthy route. The whole point of the blackmail in AWAM is to protect her son. Without kids, there can be none of that here.
Technically it isn't just to protect her son though, it's also to protect her new friend's son, which would be the case here.
 

DIRTY Filthy RAT

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Technically it isn't just to protect her son though, it's also to protect her new friend's son, which would be the case here.
Lily is so hot, wish she was the mc as the hot teacher :love: but atleast we get to see some of her sex scenes with her boss & looks like she’s trying to get mc into a 3way with hubby too. Lily’s son looks like that shota boy from another game where he gets adopted by hot big titty minx, can’t remember the name of that one though:ROFLMAO:
 

grumpyoldcat

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OK, I tried. As it was pointed out several times here, the premise is just nonsensical. I get it. It's a porn VN. But all of the writing is terrible: grammar, dialogue, motivation, concept. ALL OF IT.

If this was Alice: A Hard Life in a Fantasy World, you could wave away all the dumb shit as magic or something.

Good luck with the game development, but I'm out.
 

Caylake

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Technically it isn't just to protect her son though, it's also to protect her new friend's son, which would be the case here.
As the story progresses you will realize that this is not the case. Alice is a teacher at school to catch a man named Toby, to get information about him. toby is Jacob's father. Please wait for the update!
 
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88Michele88

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Another good game ruined by forced scenes(handjob to that old man is disgusting) and a bad grammar
I agree with almost whole sentence, on an other hands I don't give a fuck about english, so it ain't my problem.
But yeah forced hadjob it killed the game.
 

Samu Al Hydit

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Hoo boy, 5 minutes in, and a bunch of grammatical mistakes and stilted dialogues just smack you in the face.

Please hire a proofreader and a better wordsmith.
 
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