VN Ren'Py The Five Star Stories [v0.5] [The Narrator]

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MrBenny

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Yep, variety is the spice of life. I saw my first live snapper back in the mid 80's. It looked like it had a wildebeest caught in a headlock and was extra fragrant(not smelly, but musky). I came away with the glazed doughnut mouth and enjoyed the scent for the rest of the night, then got a quick reminder sniff of my upper lip in the morning before taking my morning shower.
Oh, those fond memories of a sweet tasting young muff. A memory for me...the morning after attending a huge college house party with one of my chad (at least he thought he was) friends. Meeting up with him the next morning while he was crawling out of a bathroom while he was driving the porcelain bus (puking and sleeping on a toilet bowl). Because he got too drunk while making a complete ass of himself the night before. And missing out on a the hot sexy girl he was originally interested in at the party. I then asked him..."Hey smell this (my finger)"…and then telling him that sweet smell is from that hot girl you were trying to get into her, see what you missed out on because you can't hold your alcohol, you fucking tool. :KEK:
 
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Nice short VN, liked the story and how it unfolded, the sister is very cute, though can't see them as twins, it like the brother was made by another uglier man, while the sister has all the good features from mother and a cute man, but then again the brother still looked better then her ex boyfriend, that guy was a total ugly frog. Anyway keep up the good work, I'm sure you even capable to make larger VN with more a deeper story.
/shrug We're not twins but my sister is hot, while I'm ugly af. The running joke is I was the mailman's baby or one of us was adopted. We were curious enough to get a DNA test and turns out we are actual full siblings though. I guess biology is just weird sometimes.
 
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FaceCrap

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I hope the author is aware that is already a thing...
Your point being? The thing you refer to is not a VN. There's probably more VN's out there with a title that exists in a different medium.
There're also ones that use an existing expression as title.
As long as the other one isn't a VN, then it's ok to name it whatever he wants.
Nowhere is it implied that it is based on or a VN version of its namesake.
 

merleved

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Ditto on the bush, seeing to many bald pussies just ain't right!
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Need way more bush in these games. Glad to see some here, hope to see more.

The dudes crying about hair can go take their pick of LITERALLY thousands of games where all the women look like bald barbie dolls. But instead, they'd rather come onto the thread for one of the very rare few that features bush...and complain about how awful the bush is.
 

loikl

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She's telling a story, so it happened in the past, but there are renders of that guy fingering her for, like, a second before she tells him to stop.
In defense of whoever wrote that comment, these types of "MC/sister/mother/girlfriend/wife" games from the beginning always bring bad vibes.

Let's hope that's not the case.
 

Jash83

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Your point being? The thing you refer to is not a VN. There's probably more VN's out there with a title that exists in a different medium.
There're also ones that use an existing expression as title.
As long as the other one isn't a VN, then it's ok to name it whatever he wants.
Nowhere is it implied that it is based on or a VN version of its namesake.
OK, if you say so. In fact, I think I'm going to make a game of my own. It's going to be a fantasy game about, oh I dunno, some kingdoms who sort out their territorial conflicts with ritualised war games and you're going to play as the king, who has to maintain positive sexual relationships with his harem of female generals to win the games and retain his throne.

I'm going to call it "Game of Thrones". That's a good name for a porn VN.
 

JGNeon

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Nice! I just noticed the thread here as well, and the dev is here, so I'll repeat what I said on that other forum (I'll avoid naming that certain site to avoid getting slapped by mods):

Wow! That was hot! The visuals were great, but the dev needs to put some more work into the code. A few pointers for the dev:
  • Although this is a KN, it should be simple code work to let you choose the names of both main characters, if you want to change them from their defaults, to make the story more "personal" (from the reader's point of view).
    • Mostly, this is just by and using a simple variable reference; I've provided some example code below.
    • If you do this, be careful to not use a blind search-and-replace, especially since the word "jack" is also used as the verb, in addition to the narrator's name.
  • Some lines where Lisa was talking, were attributed to Jack, so these need to be fixed. For the future, I'd also suggest having an "outsider" (either a friend, or someone you know might be interested in this type of story) playtest the story, to look for typos or other dialogue errors, visual issues, etc. Could even be a stranger on a forum somewhere, as long as it's not you, just so you can a second set of eyes; when you work on a project, you can easily miss non-obvious issues.
  • A different style should be used for the narrator's thoughts, the *** bits before and after the text looks a bit messy. Adding a new "character" with the name of "Jack's thoughts" (or with the changed name); I've included some example code below.
So, I did some tinkering around, and here are some example code for my suggestions.

For script.rpy:
Python:
define l = Character("[Lisa]")
define j = Character("[Jack]")
define jt = Character("[Jack]'s thoughts",what_prefix="{i}",what_suffix="{/i}")
This is in the block where you've defined your characters. This will define jt as a "speakable" character representing Jack's internal thoughts, this will also ensure that this character's "spoken" text will be stylized with italics.
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As for Myvirginsister.rpy (the first story in what I assume is going to be some sort of anthology), here's some example code to put right after the introduction, but before going into the story itself:
Python:
python:
    Jack=renpy.input("Enter the name of the male main character (leave blank for Jack):", with_none="Jack").strip()
    if not Jack:
        Jack="Jack"
    Lisa=renpy.input("Enter the name of the female main character (leave blank for Lisa):", with_none="Lisa").strip()
    if not Lisa:
        Lisa="Lisa"
This will define the variable containing the name of the two main characters, and setting their default if text was left blank. The strip() function will strip whitespaces before and after, just so it will handle if you input spaces as their names instead of actual text.

Then, in the script lines themselves, replace "Jack" with "[Jack]" and "Lisa" with "[Lisa]" - this is one of the most simple ways to do this (and, like I said, avoid the temptation of a simple "search and replace all").

I'll be looking forward to see how the story continues.
 

The Narrator

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Nov 14, 2023
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Nice! I just noticed the thread here as well, and the dev is here, so I'll repeat what I said on that other forum (I'll avoid naming that certain site to avoid getting slapped by mods):

Wow! That was hot! The visuals were great, but the dev needs to put some more work into the code. A few pointers for the dev:
  • Although this is a KN, it should be simple code work to let you choose the names of both main characters, if you want to change them from their defaults, to make the story more "personal" (from the reader's point of view).
    • Mostly, this is just by and using a simple variable reference; I've provided some example code below.
    • If you do this, be careful to not use a blind search-and-replace, especially since the word "jack" is also used as the verb, in addition to the narrator's name.
  • Some lines where Lisa was talking, were attributed to Jack, so these need to be fixed. For the future, I'd also suggest having an "outsider" (either a friend, or someone you know might be interested in this type of story) playtest the story, to look for typos or other dialogue errors, visual issues, etc. Could even be a stranger on a forum somewhere, as long as it's not you, just so you can a second set of eyes; when you work on a project, you can easily miss non-obvious issues.
  • A different style should be used for the narrator's thoughts, the *** bits before and after the text looks a bit messy. Adding a new "character" with the name of "Jack's thoughts" (or with the changed name); I've included some example code below.
So, I did some tinkering around, and here are some example code for my suggestions.

For script.rpy:
Python:
define l = Character("[Lisa]")
define j = Character("[Jack]")
define jt = Character("[Jack]'s thoughts",what_prefix="{i}",what_suffix="{/i}")
This is in the block where you've defined your characters. This will define jt as a "speakable" character representing Jack's internal thoughts, this will also ensure that this character's "spoken" text will be stylized with italics.
You don't have permission to view the spoiler content. Log in or register now.

As for Myvirginsister.rpy (the first story in what I assume is going to be some sort of anthology), here's some example code to put right after the introduction, but before going into the story itself:
Python:
python:
    Jack=renpy.input("Enter the name of the male main character (leave blank for Jack):", with_none="Jack").strip()
    if not Jack:
        Jack="Jack"
    Lisa=renpy.input("Enter the name of the female main character (leave blank for Lisa):", with_none="Lisa").strip()
    if not Lisa:
        Lisa="Lisa"
This will define the variable containing the name of the two main characters, and setting their default if text was left blank. The strip() function will strip whitespaces before and after, just so it will handle if you input spaces as their names instead of actual text.

Then, in the script lines themselves, replace "Jack" with "[Jack]" and "Lisa" with "[Lisa]" - this is one of the most simple ways to do this (and, like I said, avoid the temptation of a simple "search and replace all").

I'll be looking forward to see how the story continues.
I know some coding too, but "Jack's Thoughts" is a great idea. Thanks!
 

FaceCrap

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OK, if you say so. In fact, I think I'm going to make a game of my own. It's going to be a fantasy game about, oh I dunno, some kingdoms who sort out their territorial conflicts with ritualised war games and you're going to play as the king, who has to maintain positive sexual relationships with his harem of female generals to win the games and retain his throne.

I'm going to call it "Game of Thrones". That's a good name for a porn VN.
Yeah, so good someone already did...
 

The Narrator

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Nov 14, 2023
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Hello everybody!
Please can you follow me on patreon by becoming a free member so you can write me your thoughts after the launch of Patreon chat. Thank you!
Everyone is welcomed.
 
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