This gets a star because the renders are high quality, but otherwise it's a swing and a miss. Hard pass.
Writing is long and cliché, and dialogue is very clunky overall. Lots of people talking about things that happened or are happening without you actually seeing them happen. https://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/ShowDontTell And when they do talk, conversation doesn't sound natural at all.
Choices are entirely irrelevant, they might as well not exist
There are no lewd scenes other than a couple of boobs which really have no reason for existing
I think the dev is too high on their own supply. Writing something *long* isn't a substitute for writing something *interesting*
SPOILERS
If you really wanted to explore the theme of dealing with terminal diseases and how it affects families, then *show* that happening to this family. Instead we go from mom being perfectly healthy, flash forward a decade and she has stage 4 cancer. Dad is only shown in some black-and-white memory type renders. I don't care about MC. I don't care about Olivia. I don't care about anyone. You haven't *made* me care.
I suggest taking up a course on creative writing and critiquing a few existing novels to understand what's missing here. Great work on the renders and lighting, but those two alone do not a great game make.
You could argue it's early days and the dev is going for a "story-first AVN", but if that's the case, why is everyone other than the token friend a super hot female? Why are most girls automatically smitten by the MC? Why should I believe it???
https://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/ClicheStorm
https://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/TasteTheRainbow
https://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/TattooAsCharacterType
Writing is long and cliché, and dialogue is very clunky overall. Lots of people talking about things that happened or are happening without you actually seeing them happen. https://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/ShowDontTell And when they do talk, conversation doesn't sound natural at all.
Choices are entirely irrelevant, they might as well not exist
There are no lewd scenes other than a couple of boobs which really have no reason for existing
I think the dev is too high on their own supply. Writing something *long* isn't a substitute for writing something *interesting*
SPOILERS
If you really wanted to explore the theme of dealing with terminal diseases and how it affects families, then *show* that happening to this family. Instead we go from mom being perfectly healthy, flash forward a decade and she has stage 4 cancer. Dad is only shown in some black-and-white memory type renders. I don't care about MC. I don't care about Olivia. I don't care about anyone. You haven't *made* me care.
I suggest taking up a course on creative writing and critiquing a few existing novels to understand what's missing here. Great work on the renders and lighting, but those two alone do not a great game make.
You could argue it's early days and the dev is going for a "story-first AVN", but if that's the case, why is everyone other than the token friend a super hot female? Why are most girls automatically smitten by the MC? Why should I believe it???
https://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/ClicheStorm
https://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/TasteTheRainbow
https://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/TattooAsCharacterType