A plot for a Visual Novel

iamabot001

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Having played a lot of games from this genre, I have come across a thought, which I'd like to share today.

There are two main characters, a young male protagonist and his single mother living together. The sexual tension starts when the protagonist turns a teenager (which of course is only mentioned in the game). This tension grows as he grows older. The mother does notice, but ignores it as a common trait among growing teenagers. But the unrelenting protagonist does not stop and keeps pushing the boundaries of his already doomed relationship. The mother loves him too much to send him away but very aggressively sticks to her morals despite his advances. But the sexual frustration keeps growing.

So now she turns to other men to satisfy her sexual frustration, but she just can't seem to get it off her head. She knows she has been corrupted and the her brain is slowly giving in to the temptation of the taboo. But as strong willed she is, she will never give in. The protagonist too, seemed to have inherited that trait of never giving up. So the tension between them keeps escalating. The more he pushes her, the more her desires try to break the invisible wall and commit to taboo, but she just keeps on pushing herself not to do it. The harder is the temptation, further away she advances to other men.

He sees his mother bringing random men to their house, he can't do anything about it. But he does watch. He feels rage but he watches. His mother knows he does watch. That provides her an edge to climax. She knows she is on the path of no return. She knows she wants to do it but is equally committed to not let the taboo happen.

One fine day the protagonist comes home only to see his mother engaged with yet another person, but he feels a rage unprecedented and decides he has had enough of all the drama and just barges in on them. This creates a lot of tension between the two. He stops talking to her, starts ignoring her and rejecting any attempt to restore a balance. It is then that the mother finally breaks. She tells him they will do it.

The next day was the most fateful day for the protagonist and they finally break every restriction that had ever acted upon them. His mother seems to enjoy and shows no sign of regret. He thinks his life is fulfilled. All his fantasies are coming to life. He couldn't have dreamt of it. There is nothing more he could have asked of her.

He wakes up the next morning. He doesn't see his mother anywhere. He looks around in the apartment. His mother's door is locked. He knocks, but there is no reply. He knocks again, shouts, but no one replies. His heart skips a beat. His limbs go numb and his mind is spinning faster than the center of the milky way. It takes him a few minutes to stabilize his thoughts and he eventually finds the courage to break the door. But he was not prepared to see it. He did not want to see it. The person he loved the most is no more. He should have known. He should have known that pushing his mother to her breaking point was only going to bring him eternal misery for an instantaneous ecstasy. He pushed her too much and she could no longer cope with her conscience and gave in.

Years have passed by. Will the protagonist ever forgive himself?
 
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Adabelitoo

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I didn't get if the mother kill herself or she run away.

The plot isn't bad (imo), I'm pretty sure I read a doujin with the exact same story and a few more with at least the first part. The problem I see is that most people won't like this at all if that sad ending is the only ending because they'll feel punished regardless of the decisions they did. I like drama and tense situations but at the end of the day this is also porn and most people won't like a sad ending when the only thing they want (or at least the thing they want the most) is a good fap material, and sad situations aren't the best thing for that.

Personally I'm a super mom-son fan. I like drama and I would play that game but the happier and sweetier you make a mom-son relationship, the better for me.
 

Ying Ko

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A common complaint of Dual Family was that it was too depressing, this would be far worse.
 
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Adabelitoo

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A common complaint of Dual Family was that it was too depressing, this would be far worse.
I got a similar feeling about it but my problem with Dual Family wasn't that it was "too depressing", my problem was that DF is stupidly depressing for no real reason because the son goes from being a super ironical jerk to sad Shakespeares in two lines and the mother can't be happy for more than two lines in a row or even smile at all, and it isn't like that drama leads to something, it only leads to the same drama again and again (and the camera angles made the most annoying CGs I ever saw) and it doesn't help that the game is so fucking long without any sex content with her (at least the son's story, I never finished the dad's route, not sure what happens there).
 

Ying Ko

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I got a similar feeling about it but my problem with Dual Family wasn't that it was "too depressing", my problem was that DF is stupidly depressing for no real reason because the son goes from being a super ironical jerk to sad Shakespeares in two lines and the mother can't be happy for more than two lines in a row or even smile at all, and it isn't like that drama leads to something, it only leads to the same drama again and again (and the camera angles made the most annoying CGs I ever saw) and it doesn't help that the game is so fucking long without any sex content with her (at least the son's story, I never finished the dad's route, not sure what happens there).
I played through it once over a year ago, I can barely remember it. What was wrong with the camera angles?
 

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Most of the times you can't see shit about what's going and usually when someone is talking to you the camera only shows you like a third part of his/her face. It also doesn't help that most of the renders are dark as fuck
 

iamabot001

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I didn't get if the mother kill herself or she run away.
Well, I tried to make it as clear as possible, she kills herself. My bad anyway.

And this is obviously going to be a netorare focused game, and we already know some of those games can be really dark and depressing. NTRPG-2 for example. Overall it seems like a okayish game, but once you play it, it really hits you hard. That was what I was trying to go for. "Too depressing".
 

Adabelitoo

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Well, I tried to make it as clear as possible, she kills herself. My bad anyway.

And this is obviously going to be a netorare focused game, and we already know some of those games can be really dark and depressing. NTRPG-2 for example. Overall it seems like a okayish game, but once you play it, it really hits you hard. That was what I was trying to go for. "Too depressing".
To be honest I never thought about it as NTR, not even for a second, and I don't want to turn this thread in a "What's NTR?" V0.2 but in a nutshell, if the girl isn't dating or married to the guy then she doesn't have any obligation about who should or who shouldn't she fuck. The mother is single and free to do whatever she wants, she doesn't havea any obligation to fuck the son and the son doesn't has any rights to force his mother. I once read a doujin with that plot (I couldn't find it, I tried) and yes, it was depresseing as fuck and it was a huge sad ending, but it wasn't NTR.

Now, that kind of plot works better in Japan, if someone here makes a game like that, that dev will get LOTS of hate. Maybe the plot/game is interesting and good but it won't matter because most player won't even try it or quit it before they can value something about that game.
 

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i like dark themed games/VNs but this is just depressing. i get that you are going for that but there needs to be something more. that is what i feel anyways.
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Years have passed by. Will the protagonist ever forgive himself?
and does the story continue from here? if yes, then it might be worth playing.