Font choice was definitely the stand out thing upon starting the game, really would prefer another more readable font instead. VNs need to be readable, stylish fonts like these makes it really awkward to read, therefore voiding the written content.
The other thing that stood out, the game startup "noise". Way too loud, and honestly noises like these are why I prefer these games to be silent than be bombarded with maxed volume sounds on fresh launch. Ease the players into the sound(like default it to 50% or not have sound until they hit start), not startle them on launch and make them bleed out their ears.
There should also be a different effect used for kisses, like a heart or kiss mark, but anger mark is definitely out of place.
Yeah, the game creator will not be confused with a wordsmith. Half of the text sections where chat speech instead of actual sentences.
The "stepsister" acting like a total bitch for no reason makes no sense whatsoever. The mother and sister acting weird also makes little sense. There is nothing interesting so far with this title. I'll check back in 6 months to see if it moved anywhere.
I kind of hate the writing, but that's the only major mark against this game. It's in okay English, the renders are okay, the fonts and scenes are okay, the plot is barely okay, and it's not quite boring. The dev seems to have a feel for a baseline game, and now it's just a waiting game to see whether it develops in a direction we enjoy - looks like it'll be quest-driven, but nothing like that exists yet, nor do the "serious" themes.
Based on 0.1, this is not a total write-off yet, but I see nothing interesting.